TPO24- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Without a shadow of the doubt, all the people must learn to work hard and experience the difficulty of life in the early age. some people assert that parents must encourage their teenager children to take part-time job to prepare them for adult life. According to my own experience and actual observation of life have led me to be agree with this issue. I have many reason to prove my point.
The first and possibly the major consequential reason is that, all the parent want their children be successful in their future and trying to provide their demand, but they know beside this they must prepare them for confronting with problems. they should encourage them to work in their teen to gain experience. parents are not always with children and can’t always economical supporting them. children must learn to be in the society and learn to work and communicate with people in society in work place. they should help them to find some part-time job that can be unpaid works.
Another point than springing to mind is that, all the student study in the school and learn some information about different fields but they can't practically. If parent want to their children education be useful for them they must encourage them to learn some fields practically, for example, in the university we learn a lot of information about chemical structure and their merits in the development of medical field but we never work on the chemical composition practically and in the lab, and this cause to we don’t understand deeply the issue.
To sum it all up bay taking all the details into consideration, parents should encourage their children to take some part-time job to improve their information and wisdom and to learn to confronting with the problems in the future and I think it can be very useful in their future life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Some
...he difficulty of life in the early age. some people assert that parents must encoura...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun reason seems to be countable; consider using: 'many reasons'.
Suggestion: many reasons
... me to be agree with this issue. I have many reason to prove my point. The first and pos...
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Suggestion: They
...are them for confronting with problems. they should encourage them to work in their ...
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Suggestion: Parents
... work in their teen to gain experience. parents are not always with children and can&ap...
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Suggestion: Children
...os;t always economical supporting them. children must learn to be in the society and lea...
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Suggestion: They
...e with people in society in work place. they should help them to find some part-time...
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Message: This phrase is probably grammatically incorrect. Write 'help them find' instead.
Suggestion: help them find
...e in society in work place. they should help them to find some part-time job that can be unpaid w...
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Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...rmation about different fields but they cant practically. If parent want to their ch...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, for example, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1520.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 313.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85623003195 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6212572943 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 212.727598566 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.453674121406 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 461.7 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 100.478957167 48.9658058833 205% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 126.666666667 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0833333333 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.33333333333 5.45110844103 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293126768131 0.236089414692 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127126841859 0.076458572812 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108231134097 0.0737576698707 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19983428328 0.150856017488 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.068083368325 0.0645574589148 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 86.8835125448 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.