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children need to perform well in their academics in order to get a good job. Parents are required to provide enough attention so that the children perform well in their exams. I agree that giving money to children for the high marks they obtain for exams will be motivating for them. The reasons for my viewpoint is elaborated in the following paragraphs.

Firstly, it will be inspiring and motivating for students to learn if they are adequately rewarded. The parents are likely to tempt their children to provide money so that the child will pass with highest marks which is essential to get admission in universities. For instance, I was told by my parents that if I get good marks they will give me 100 Indian rupees. I was thrilled by that offer since the maximum amount of money that I received from my elders was ten rupee. Soon I scored good marks. These kinds of activities will bring good future to the offspring because they learn well and acquire knowledge which is the strongest equipment in life. Therefore, it is appropriate to provide money for the kids for excellent performance in school.

Secondly, the child will learn to save money which will later on tend to have a good habit. In this modern era children are not aware of the value of money since the world is advancing and everyone is employed. Likewise, if the younger generation are not taught the value of money they will lose it eventually. For example, when I was a child I got high marks in maths, my father gave me twenty rupees.Likewise, when I scored higher marks for the rest of the subject I got a lot of money which I collected and saved to buy a cycle for riding. In this way it is possible to train young ones the importance of money and its utilisation.

However, like the coin which has two sides this act of providing children with money for the high grades can also make them poor in studies and go in a wrong direction in their life. this will negatively impact society. For instance, when the child is given money for their grades they can use it to spend it to buy drugs or any illegal items which a child should not use. this can be very dangerous since it can make them an addict. Moreover, they will try to steal money if they do not get the money from their parents since they cannot obtain good marks for the exam. Hence, it is important that parents need to check upon their students regarding the way they spend money.

To reiterate, giving gifts to students when they attain high marks is a good way since they are motivated and learn to save money. Nevertheless, a parent needs to be prudent and carefully monitor their kids in the way they utilize money.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Children
children need to perform well in their academics...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mics in order to get a good job. Parents are required to provide enough attentio...
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...to get a good job. Parents are required to provide enough attention so that the ...
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Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'with the highest'.
Suggestion: with the highest
...ovide money so that the child will pass with highest marks which is essential to get admissi...
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Line 3, column 468, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'rupee' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'rupees'.
Suggestion: rupees
... that I received from my elders was ten rupee. Soon I scored good marks. These kinds ...
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Suggestion: Likewise
... maths, my father gave me twenty rupees.Likewise, when I scored higher marks for the res...
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... go in a wrong direction in their life. this will negatively impact society. For ins...
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...gal items which a child should not use. this can be very dangerous since it can make...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, however, if, likewise, moreover, nevertheless, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, as to, for example, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2195.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 483.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.54451345756 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68799114503 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43029085259 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.434782608696 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 674.1 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.1146706512 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.4583333333 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.125 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.58333333333 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.05 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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