Parenting is the most difficult job in the world. It needs a lot of hardworking and learning. It need acceptance and forgiveness. People have different approch for spending time with their kids. I believe family time and playing with kids is much more important than helping in schoolwork for parents. I bring the following reason to support my idea.
First, play is the most important part of learning process for kids. kids learn by playing and roleplaying in different situation. they learn how to react and how to communicate with others as well as improves their emotional and behavioural intelligence. Recent studies showed that kids who had the chance of playing with their parent had better problem solving skills and were able to communicate better with others. In fact, by playing games with their parents they had the opportunity to practice different senarios and behaviour in a safe place. Therefore, playing with kids is very important for their developement.
Also, parents are not teachers. They do not know how to teach to their kids and their relationship will harm by being in that position. Education is a fluid subject that change by time and the way that parents learned in school is completely different from the new education sterategy. Even for teachers in school recommendation by expert educator is that they better not to teach their own childeren. Study showes that because of the love and close relationship this teaching ends up to unrealistic expectation and it is not proffessional.That is why it is better for parents to not engage with their kids school work and even if the kid needed help hire a tutor for them.
In conclusion, parenting is the most difficult work and needs lots of skills and learning. Playing games with kids are one of the most important part of kids developement and parent should set a time for playing with their kids for fun activity and playing. It not only improves the problem-solving skills of kids and their communication, but also improves their mental health.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Kids
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Suggestion: They
...and roleplaying in different situation. they learn how to react and how to communica...
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Suggestion: That
...expectation and it is not proffessional.That is why it is better for parents to not ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, therefore, well, in conclusion, in fact, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1691.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 340.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97352941176 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84932305443 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.479411764706 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 494.1 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 56.7405278439 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.55 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.85 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210153501377 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.070252135461 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0635597258637 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149648143414 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0520307254396 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.25 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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