Tpo45Do you agree or disagree with the following statement In the past young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives Use specific reasons and example

It goes without saying that in this progressive and sophisticated world where we live, decision making for each individual is of utmost importance since it will lead their lives either to flourish or be doomed to a failure. While some people believe that young people used to be dependent on their parents to make the important decisions of their lives, others stand at the other end of the continuum, holding the view that nowadays people are capable of making their own decisions about their personal life. Personally speaking, I strongly agree with this statement and the reasons to substantiate my viewpoint are elaborated upon hereunder.
To begin with, because of the scarcity of up to date information and relevant knowledge of different subjects, children used to be dependent on their parents and take advantage of their personal experience in order to make a sound decision. To be more specific, with the advent of technology and the internet, in particular, young people are being provided with diverse assortment of information and wisdom to rely on so as to make a rational decision. However, it is no secret to anyone that, earlier in time, the only fundamental source of knowledge and wisdom was family and the parents. An example can drive this notion home. When comparing myself with my twenty year old brother, I can vividly realize the distinction in the way we use to make decisions. While I still depend on my parents and consider them as the main treasury of experience and knowledge, my brother uses his social network friends and take their advice instead; on the basis of which he will make a decision about his future and demands. Being from an older generation, I can understand that there is a huge gap between the way my brother and I make decisions about either the most important or the most trivial aspect of our lives.
Furthermore, thanks to the genesis of the social community services, young people have been empowered with a strong socializing ability which will lead them to make a decision on their own. In this vein, it is taken for granted that being equipped with a strong communication ability will shed lights on young people's state of mind. The more people they see and communicate with, the better their ability to make decision. That is to say, young people, despite of the previous generation who used to be dependent on their parents, can use their peers and other news resources to make a sound decision; this opportunity was not accessible and available to the past generation. In fact, past generation did not have the challenges that the younger generation experience; as a result, it is nonsense for young people to be dependent on someone who has not taste the challenge himself. As an illustration, my parents did not have the hectic university life as we do, they were not concerned about different professors or a variety of other related issues. However, when I have a problem like this, I can easily and conveniently ask my friends and use their experience in order to make my own decision.
In conclusion, having the aforementioned reasons and points into consideration, I strongly agree that young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. Not only do they take advantage of the up to date knowledge and information, but also they can socialize with their peers to make a rational decision.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
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Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
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Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'tasted'.
Suggestion: tasted
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, so, still, while, as to, in conclusion, in fact, in particular, as a result, to begin with, that is to say

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 90.0 52.1666666667 173% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2806.0 1977.66487455 142% => OK
No of words: 574.0 407.700716846 141% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88850174216 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89472135074 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76140922499 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.454703832753 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 900.9 618.680645161 146% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.4424696847 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.684210526 100.406767564 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.2105263158 20.6045352989 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.52631578947 5.45110844103 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.453910390984 0.236089414692 192% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.150373945403 0.076458572812 197% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107253977028 0.0737576698707 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.328114495594 0.150856017488 218% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0592946649072 0.0645574589148 92% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 11.7677419355 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 58.1214874552 71% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 86.8835125448 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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