TPO47 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is important to know about events happening around the world even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

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TPO47
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

always some events happen all around the world which people were profoundly affected by them. In my point of view, events play a crucial role in every society which has a lasting impact on our social and personal life. this essay is going to explains my opinion.

First, of course community was affected by events, and knowing them can help society in some ways. One of the most significant issue which can play a vital role is events which the responsible government has always tried to control them. last year, when a dangerous earthquake happened in Kermanshah. The huge number of people were died and injured. In addition, a lot of houses, hospitals and schools were collapsed in that event. every day I followed news, the government collect cloths, bottle of water and money to send there. Besides, I have had a friend who is a doctor. my friend and I went there to help them. my friend became volunteer to cure people injured, they appreciated her, and most of them became good. If I did not know that terrible event, I would not help them.

Second, recently the value of dollars is changing day by day. some people are trying to buy dollars to save money. Also, others are trying to sell their dollars to invest money in banks. life has become difficult in this situation, therefore, I should know prevalent news to manage my life. For example, six months ago when I read news about currency, I decided to buy dollars. As a result, I had not have issue to take a TOEFL because I had enough money to buy it.

Although some people avoid watching news and events for their affect, I firmly believe that, we should aware of events to help for controlling situation.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, if, second, so, therefore, for example, in addition, of course, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1380.0 1977.66487455 70% => OK
No of words: 298.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.63087248322 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38567712397 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.563758389262 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 426.6 618.680645161 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.2795460325 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 69.0 100.406767564 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.9 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.85 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.105742681967 0.236089414692 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.030789693221 0.076458572812 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0360446959531 0.0737576698707 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0690127730541 0.150856017488 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0254247058124 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.8 11.7677419355 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 58.1214874552 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.98 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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