TPO48 - Independent Writing
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
With the growing concern of humans' modernization and progression in various fields, no one can deny the role of planning for young people. In this regard, some people are inclined to orchestrating a plan for youth is crucial for their lives, on the contrary others believe that there is no difference in planning for juvenile between nowadays and the past time. Although both groups have their own position, I firmly believe that the first group carries more weight. In the following parts, I will cogently explain my reasons to justify my viewpoint.
First of all, due to the progress in technology and easy access to the internet, some young people waste their time each day. For example, evidence shows that young people have an avid interest in playing video games and surfing on the internet. In this situation, sometimes youth are immersed in playing and searching on web pages. Drawing from my own experience, I need to admit that every day when I come back home from the university I see that how my little brother seats in front of his laptop and plays video games until midnight. thus, I think that he is wasting his time each day and this problem becomes a big concern for our family. Therefore, I think that if nowadays kids have a plan for their life they will not waste their time.
In addition, today competition among young people is increasing to acquire university positions or job vacancies. To be more specific, most youth would like to procure an appropriate position in the high ranking universities or a good job. thus ability to schedule a plan helps them to reach their goals. For instance, in my country, if a student wants to be accepted in a good university he/she needs to pass several exams like school final exams, university entrance exams, and sometimes one English language exam. thus, due to strict competition among young people, I believe that today all of them need to schedule their plan to pass these tests.
In the light of the above mentioned reasons, I think that nowadays young people need to organize and make a plan for their lives to prevent wasting their time and assure their success in the future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 352, Rule ID: PAST_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'pastime'?
Suggestion: pastime
...g for juvenile between nowadays and the past time. Although both groups have their own po...
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Suggestion: Thus
...p and plays video games until midnight. thus, I think that he is wasting his time ea...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ily. Therefore, I think that if nowadays kids have a plan for their life they wil...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Thus
...igh ranking universities or a good job. thus ability to schedule a plan helps them t...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: thus,
...igh ranking universities or a good job. thus ability to schedule a plan helps them t...
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Suggestion: Thus
...nd sometimes one English language exam. thus, due to strict competition among young ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, first of all, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1784.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 373.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78284182306 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48847872413 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.533512064343 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 550.8 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.5682076076 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.5 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3125 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.875 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151997285154 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.054807195214 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0414049300202 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100151051348 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.036007448862 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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