Tpo51- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
With the growing concern of our juveniles behavior, no one can deny the role of movies and television on them. In this regard, some people believe that TV and movies could be beneficial for the youth and might have a good effect on them. Personally, I agree with this statement and in the following part, I will explain my reasons to justify my viewpoint.
To begin with, TV programs and movies can educate our young people positively. These programs are good sources of knowledge for the juveniles. To be more specific, documentaries and historical movies should be considered as one of the easiest ways to gain more knowledge regarding our nature, novel technology, science, and history. I frequently watch the scientific documentary and I believe that watching these programs are similar to the reading books. As a result, the more gaining knowledge, the more positive effect on the mind and behavior of people is seen. Besides, some TV channels broadcast school tasks for students to help them learning their tasks more efficiently. For instance, when I was a high school student I used to watch "education channel" on TV and when I wanted to take the school's exams, my performance was better than the other students.
In addition, young people can be amused by TV programs and movies. In other words, TV programs and shows should be considered as a good source to fill the free time for the youth. Besides, I think that listening to soft music joined with nature scenes reduces stress and is fantastic for the mind of our young. It is my firm belief that these kinds of programs can be broadcasted by television to affect young people positively. In this way, I think that TV programs and movies can prevent young people from doing some negative works like gambling on the Internet or watching pornography.
In the light of the above-mentioned reasons, I believe that television and movies positively affect our juvenile mind and behavior by helping them to increase their own knowledge and amusing them by providing some interesting programs in a positive way.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 643, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[9]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to learn' or 'learn'.
Suggestion: to learn; learn
... school tasks for students to help them learning their tasks more efficiently. For insta...
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Line 7, column 236, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a positive way" with adverb for "positive"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... by providing some interesting programs in a positive way.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, if, regarding, so, for instance, i think, in addition, as a result, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1736.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 350.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80411359635 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488571428571 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 530.1 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.8785899437 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.5 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.875 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.625 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215761927712 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0761474326756 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0553077273992 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137355442702 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0386430976311 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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