In twenty years, there will be fewer cars in use than they are today
In today’s world, transportation by whichever mode remains a pertinent part of human life. We wake every day to commute to different places to begin our daily activities with the mindset to return through commuting in cars, rail or plane. I believe that our use of vehicles can never diminish with time. in fact, our usage of cars will continue to grow as technology advances. I feel this way for the two reasons which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, the use of cars as a means of transporting goods to the market has engendered the need to continue to have better cars to commute farm produce for buying and selling. Over the years, cars are continually employed to move farm produce after harvest to the points where they could be exchanged for money. My personal experience portrays a specific example of this. Fifteen years ago, in a remote in south-west Nigeria, where my father had a cocoa farm. After harvest, my siblings and I carried basket of cocoa to the market square to sell to intending buyers. we continued with this practice until my father purchased his first Volvo 504, which we now used to convey our newly harvested cocoa to sell. With the introduction of the car to our business, we never experienced any damage to our food crop and as well made more profit by transporting more of the cocoa to the market.
Secondly, the availability of cars has made remote communities reachable by health workers which have decreased infant mortality rates across Africa and other remote villages across the world. For instance, in Nigeria, infant mortality used to be on the high side and this most specific to the northern states in the countries. This was so rampant due to the absence of cars and good roads to reach extremely remote communities in the northern part of the country. However, with the introduction of good cars and the renovation of roads across the country, health workers could have access to these communities to deliver good health services to rural dwellers.
In conclusion, I strongly disagree that there would be a decrease in the use of cars for years to come. This is because of the far-reaching effects of the use of cars to transport goods for farmers and also to reach rural communities for effective health care delivery.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, well, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, in fact, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1908.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 395.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83037974684 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65349065539 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516455696203 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 595.8 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.8578255384 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.0 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9444444444 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.27777777778 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18718876757 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0623780624816 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0554392258915 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116294376276 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.02493504968 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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