A university has money in its budget to do one thing to improve its facilities for students. It can either improve the quality of the technology (for example computers and printers) that it provides for students or it can redesign spaces where students hold club meetings and gather with friends in their spare time to make these areas more comfortable and appealing. Which idea do you prefer and why
It goes without saying that in this progressive and sophisticated world which where we live, choosing wise strategies by university plays a critical role in any society. Allocating budget is one of the most important roles of any university to have successful students. While some people prefer to spend more money to improve the quality of the technology for the student, others like to redesign space such as club meeting. I personally believe that provides improve technology is more beneficial for two main reasons which I elaborated upon hereunder.
First and foremost improving the quality of the technology such as computers and printer leads to university get the best rank in the country. To be more specifics, the university with new technology provides the best state for student work in their project. The more the new technology, the more the high-quality article. For example, when I studied in my university, in order to do my master thesis, as the same, the university got a decision to update the devices of the lab in order to have more articles for publish in the scientific journal. As a result, I am able to write the best essay from my thesis with high accuracy data. That shows how new technology improves the quality of the study.
Furthermore, providing new technology appeal to more students in order to get the best certificate in study life. In fact, students tend to study in the best university since in the future, if they study in the high-rank university, they will able to get a better job. As a study shows, a host of students who study in the 10 top universities in their country, after their graduated they find the best offer job compared with their friends which they not studied in the top university. As a result, choosing the best university with the best facilities is a wise decision for every student in any society.
All in all, taking into accounts of these factors, I believe that improve the quality of the technology not only help the universities to have the best state among of the others university, but also help the student have the more opportunity in the future life. Obviously, I believe that improving the quality of technology is more helpful.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, so, while, for example, in fact, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.0752688172 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1831.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 378.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84391534392 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75792477127 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.465608465608 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 606.6 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.3780486981 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.4375 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.625 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29248401478 0.236089414692 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111720944524 0.076458572812 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.069174001145 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189059643559 0.150856017488 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0667468209831 0.0645574589148 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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