video games are waste of time.
Playing games on a computer is a waste of time. It consumes children's time and leads to no such benefit, infact causes some health issues and I would never allow them to play video games. The reason I hold this opinion is explained below.
To begin with, One of the main reasons is health, What happens when we play games on the computer? we sit on a chair, our eyes focused on the computer screen, our mind continuously pressurized, and our body posture disturb. So, all lead to bad health. Mostly young children play games and they develop ailments at an early age. We can lucidly observe this in our surroundings many children have specs and when we ask for reasons, the answer is always the same, that we use phones or laptops a lot. Games are important for children, games are brainstorming activities but outdoor games are the one, not computer games. The outdoor game helps a lot like they maintain the good physical health, no pressure build and one of the most advantage of this is sports lead to a release of sweet and which releases serotonin and this work as an antidepressant. Also when we play our blood circulation rate increases and lead to fresh oxygen supply to the brain and that leads to relief to it. This really helps children to be mentally and physically strong. We can conclude that both are consuming time but the point to consider is that video games make the body lethargic and children don't feel to do any activity further but the sports make children strong and they will do more activity.
To carry on further, we see a life of children nowadays that how students grow? They attend their lecture online, have less interaction with people, and remain in their own world and this makes the children introverted, and add on this if they get the facilities to play at home, they would never try to put step outside of the home. Instead, they move out of home, interact with other children of their age, they will enter the real world, they actually start meeting people in person and this helps a lot in child development. Playing a video game is just not a present time waste but this could also lead to future consequences and young one always hesitate to talk to someone outside. Although they have to get rid of this hesitation at some point in life and that time would be more frustrating. Also, I think video games are an addiction more than games. For instance, my nephew, who always plays a video game, barely comes out of his room and as his brain is so consumed by that activity, he faces a lot of difficulties to concentrate. So this shows how a child has to pay for playing video games, not for that particular period but also for other consequences.
To put it into a nutshell, I believe that video games are a huge waste of time parallel to mental and health disturbance. In my perspective, it is better to take a 10min walk to fresh mind rather than playing video games for an hour.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, if, really, so, as to, for instance, i think, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 13.8261648746 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2404.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 530.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 4.5358490566 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79809637944 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46117303953 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494339622642 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 746.1 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.9507843234 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.52173913 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0434782609 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.47826086957 5.45110844103 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.300103652142 0.236089414692 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11305067209 0.076458572812 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.14115626497 0.0737576698707 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.268581328319 0.150856017488 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0995600593002 0.0645574589148 154% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.35 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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