The perception of travelling among people is changing vastly. Increasing tourists are starting to make their travellings into a cultural experience and a chance to understand another civilisation. The museum visit has become irreplaceable in most travel plans. In contrast, based on my experiences, I do not believe that visiting museums always do help to understand a country. I feel this way for two reasons, which this essay will explore.
To begin with, I have to say that some museums involved the theme of the exhibition with too many subjective ideologies, which may affect our objective judgements. Museums may attempt to deliver a specific impression to visitors by making the content on display selectively. I think it is fair to say that in most cases, people tend to hide their dark side of history and only present what looks perfect and flawless to gain a better reputation. For instance, the Yasukuni Shrine was primarily built for memorising soldiers who died for Japan by order of the Meiji Emperor. Its military museum, called Yushukan Museum, is under considerable controversy for alternating Japan's history during World War II. The museum's exhibition is mainly about weapons that Imperial Japan Military developed during the war and depicting the braveness and fearless of fascist soldiers. The museum claims that Japan was "forced" to start the war by the US and describe the invasion to most Asia countries as bringing liberations, which is unacceptable for the people from countries Japan was invaded and frequently accused by organisations who call for peace.
Furthermore, some people are easily bored of repeating types of items on display. There is no question that a particular kind of art or culture is critically imperative to a country and take a significant proportion in its history. Undoubtingly, those decisive cultures always take the most prominent part in a museum. However, for the people who do not correlate with that culture or are not interested in it, this can be unattractive or even tiring to see it. My personal experience is a compelling illustration of this. I am a person who does not into any religious belief and develops no interest in Buddhism culture at all, which resulted that my visit to Tokyo National Museum was a disaster for me--the displaying items were mostly religious tools and Buddhist sculptures. I love Japanese culture, and I know Buddhism is vital to Japan. However, I have to say that most people start their impression of Japan from tea, Sakura, or Ninja, but the museum in Japan may not be their cups of tea.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that visiting museums may not be the best way we learn about a country in every situation. This is because some museums do not hold an objective attitude to view the history, and the theme in some museums may not be easy for all visitors to find any correlations.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 710, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'museums'' or 'museum's'?
Suggestion: museums'; museum's
...Japans history during World War II. The museums exhibition is mainly about weapons that...
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Line 5, column 37, Rule ID: BORED_OF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'bored with'?
Suggestion: bored with
... Furthermore, some people are easily bored of repeating types of items on display. Th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, look, may, so, for instance, i feel, i think, in conclusion, in contrast, kind of, in most cases, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2418.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 484.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9958677686 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69041575982 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92028918574 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53305785124 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 776.7 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.8395472245 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.909090909 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.45454545455 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251068208249 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0727172086392 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114763281136 0.0737576698707 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178413035885 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113261629024 0.0645574589148 175% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.03 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 132.0 86.8835125448 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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