What celebrities state are of greater importance for young people rather than for older people.
From presidential elections to charity affairs, this is undeniable that celebrities have a great influence in today's societies. People have different views about on which part of a society celebrities have most impact: younger people or older individuals. I, personally, believe that youth are more eager to follow celebrities because the young know the celebrities better, and are more sentimental in manner.
One of the primary causes is that the more one knows a personality, the more they affect him. Undoubtedly, younger people are more familiar with celebrities than the older ones. For example, recently, I have visited Instagram page of Lebrun James, an outstanding American basketball player, and I saw that the majority of his followers are young generation. Following a basketball player on a social network, reading his posts day by day, and socializing about them by a friend make youth more and more knowledgable about the celebrities. Additionally, may be older people are so busy by work that they have not enough time to pursue sports games and other entertainment events, thereby getting familiar with the celebrities. Thus, having a lot of information about celebrities make them specially important for young people.
Another aspect to consider is that as some one's age goes up, he will further construct his decisions on the basis of reason and logic rather than emotions and excitements. Issues such as cinema, TV shows and music concerts are more related to humans' emotions than his intellectual abilities. For instance, last year in Tehran, one of young football fans had a heart attack and passed away just after watching his favorite team scored a goal. So, pursuing such entertainments is a matter of emotions and merriment, not reason and thinking. Because elderly men are more intellectual than emotional they value the verdicts of celebrities less than young people.
In conclusion, celebrities have much considerble effect on younger generations since young people are more familiar with celebrities, and base their decisions on emotions more than the older people do.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, so, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1769.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 334.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29640718563 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92475741889 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.571856287425 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 560.7 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.9164823171 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.933333333 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2666666667 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.53333333333 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274936316722 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0973987831057 0.076458572812 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0812241954552 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171335916607 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0172578580485 0.0645574589148 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 58.1214874552 70% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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