To what extent could extensive gaming classed as a disorder?
In 2019 WHO decided that if spending a lots of time play game, it is gaming disorder.
However, in my opinion it is a sad thing in the global world.
There are a several reasons and examples as follows.
To start with, gaming market have a lots of value and we must not evaluate gaming market future.
To be specific, according to the Daily game magazine (In south Korea) say that our society game market evaluation is 178,180,000,000,000,000 dollars.
Furthermore, it is astronomical money and it has been increase on this time.
In my opinion WHO is underestimated with game market and they are making serious mistakes.
This is because the South Korea game promotion committee evaluated that our world gaming market value will be increase 10.9 percent than 2018 year.
Also, smart phone platform will be increase 12.8 percent and personal computer platform will develop 3.2 percent than 2018.
As a result, growing game market makes more proportion and culture market will have a great impact on our life.
Second, playing game with other is a great way for me to build strong relationships with each other.
It is my personal experiment, as I grow up, computer game was my best friend and it allows me to make lots of friend.
To be specific, as I play game, I was able to build strong relationships with my friend and it was gave me opportunity to make a new friend.
As I play game, I got a opportunities for to make friend.
However, our society (for examples in the US and UK and South Korea) think that If children play game a lots of time.
It should reduce children sociality, they does not make friend but I was able to make a lots of friends.
Thus, we can easily socialize with other and become more outgoing or active through playing game with other.
Therefore, this proves that gaming is beneficial than our expectation.
All things considered, it is my believes that my argument regarding this topic has been effectively and precisely delivered with the reasons mentioned above.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, regarding, second, so, therefore, thus, for example, as a result, in my opinion, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1666.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 347.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80115273775 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7770185761 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.475504322767 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 508.5 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.639626362 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.6842105263 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2631578947 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.89473684211 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 19.0 4.53405017921 419% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.116116532577 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0459840968008 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.037249235007 0.0737576698707 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0459840968008 0.150856017488 30% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.037249235007 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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