When a new technological device becomes available some people buy it right away others wait until many have adopted it Which view do you agree with Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

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When a new technological device becomes available, some people buy it right away; others wait until many have adopted it. Which view do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

In this highly technological era, people nowadays are expected to have access to a variety of emerging technological devices, ranging from the latest electrical products to daily products. While some people embrace them immediately, some people choose to delay their purchase after those produces have been adopted by others. From my perspective, I am align with the latter statement.

First, delay purchasing enables people to save money considerably. As a matter of fact, when a latest technological device emerges, oceans of people are fanatical about it, which might increase the whole demand in the market considerably. In this case, in order to maximize the profits, usually do companies elevate the product’s price heavily. In contrast, if a majority of people have owned and adopted those commodities, the whole demand for them will decrease heavily since most of them do not need additional one. The companies that aim to ensure its sales volumes would decrease their price, which enables someone who desires to pay for them to save a lot of money. Iphone can be compelling example of this. When the latest version of Iphone is about to put on sale, a number of people expecting it and are willing to pay for it no matter how high its price is, which increases the demand for Iphone in the world market. Apple Company would regard it a commercial opportunity since they can ensure the sales volumes while pursuing the maximized bonus at the same time. Thus, they decide to put up its price. However, after a number o people have owned their own latest version of Iphone, the whole demand would decrease, which in turn urges the company to drop its price by 20 percent or even more. Under this circumstance, not only can people whom decide to delay purchasing enjoy the almost same services but also they can save a considerate amount of money.

Second, deferred shopping can also helps to people to take others’ user experiences as a reference. Granted, someone who embraces those products right away is able to enjoy its newest experience. However, they also need to bear the risk of potential downsides brought by those latest devices. In contrast, consumers who put off their shopping can better know the pros and cons of the device through others’ comments and experiences of those products. In this case, they are able to make a meticulous decision. My personal experience can be a compelling example. When Tesla’ new cars powered by electricity were sold for the first time, numerous people made a purchase. Initially, it could help them to save money since the fuel was much more expensive than the electricity. Gradually, people found that they had to bear the potential risk of being involved in explosion because the electricity could give rise to a fire and thus an explosion easily. There are several news of life loss caused by accident explosions in the world and many people who owned Tesla’s cars expressed their concerns about their own safety on the social media despite the saved cost. After being exposed to those information, I decided not to purchase Tesla’s car for the sake of my safety.

In conclusion, when a new technological device occurs, deferring the purchase should be prioritized.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 353, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'aligned'.
Suggestion: aligned
...ed by others. From my perspective, I am align with the latter statement. First, d...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 94, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...considerably. As a matter of fact, when a latest technological device emerges, oc...
^
Line 5, column 36, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'help'
Suggestion: help
.... Second, deferred shopping can also helps to people to take others’ user experien...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 961, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[8]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun news seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'some news'.
Suggestion: some news
...and thus an explosion easily. There are several news of life loss caused by accident explosi...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 1184, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'those informations'?
Suggestion: this information; those informations
... the saved cost. After being exposed to those information, I decided not to purchase Tesla’s car ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, thus, while, in conclusion, in contrast, as a matter of fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 78.0 52.1666666667 150% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2703.0 1977.66487455 137% => OK
No of words: 541.0 407.700716846 133% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99630314233 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82280071112 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6599090043 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 274.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506469500924 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 879.3 618.680645161 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.1224661666 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.961538462 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8076923077 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.96153846154 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15378528938 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0430567542096 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0399303846137 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113654827449 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0288625748909 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 86.8835125448 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 353, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'aligned'.
Suggestion: aligned
...ed by others. From my perspective, I am align with the latter statement. First, d...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 94, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...considerably. As a matter of fact, when a latest technological device emerges, oc...
^
Line 5, column 36, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'help'
Suggestion: help
.... Second, deferred shopping can also helps to people to take others’ user experien...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 961, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[8]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun news seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'some news'.
Suggestion: some news
...and thus an explosion easily. There are several news of life loss caused by accident explosi...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 1184, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'those informations'?
Suggestion: this information; those informations
... the saved cost. After being exposed to those information, I decided not to purchase Tesla’s car ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, thus, while, in conclusion, in contrast, as a matter of fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 78.0 52.1666666667 150% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2703.0 1977.66487455 137% => OK
No of words: 541.0 407.700716846 133% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99630314233 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82280071112 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6599090043 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 274.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506469500924 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 879.3 618.680645161 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.1224661666 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.961538462 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8076923077 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.96153846154 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15378528938 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0430567542096 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0399303846137 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113654827449 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0288625748909 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 86.8835125448 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.