When people succeed in life, it is because of hard work. Being lucky has nothing to do with success in life." Do you agree or disagree with the quotation above? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position.
Nowadays, many self-help books or novels with subliminal messages help people become successful. Similarly, several conferences, videos and workshops about the best way to achieve success have been frequently published on television; however, nobody is able to explain how success is exactly achieved in life because it depends on many factors. Although many external variables affect a person's success, a particular attitude will help significantly to achieve it: hard work. Personally, I agree that people succeed in life due to hard work, and being lucky has nothing to do with their success. Persevering and always doing my best will help me to achieve success, and both attitudes are consequences of hard work.
To endure in one's studies, an important step to be successful, is very related to hard work because it means to repeat a particular action many times if it is necessary until it can be done well. For example, in the academic field, if I failed a biology exam, I would have to re-take this exam again until I could pass it. In fact, if this exam were the final exam, I might have to retake the course in order to develop full competency over the subject matter. Without a doubt, a great number of study hours would be needed to improve my performance; hence, hard work is mandatory in order for me to be academically successful.
In addition, to do the best I can every time is important to be successful considering that it guarantees an ideal performance, especially when complemented with suitable instruction. For instance, if I want to score high on the TOEFL exam, it will be instrumental that each time I take a practice test I do the best I can by applying all my previous knowledge, and, each time I retake those practice tests, I have the same attitude; however, it will be also useful to have a good mentor who will do his/her best to help me to identify my weaknesses and to give me suggestions in order for me to minimize or eliminate my problem areas. Consequently, if this kind of instruction were not included in my preparation process, no matter how many times I retook the exam, I would never improve my performance on that test. In fact, that was what happened to me a few months ago. Therefore, the importance of hard work again is highlighted since both my mentor and I will need to do the best we can in order to foster success.
After having shown the importance of persevering and doing the best I can in classes and when preparing for the TOEFL exam, both of which involve hard work, undoubtedly, hard work is one of the main causes of being a successful person. Hardly ever does being lucky have something to do with success in life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 388, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...though many external variables affect a persons success, a particular attitude will hel...
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Line 4, column 14, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...sequences of hard work. To endure in ones studies, an important step to be succes...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, hence, however, if, similarly, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in addition, in fact, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2220.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 471.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71337579618 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65859790218 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78580697753 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498938428875 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 718.2 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 89.6879790928 48.9658058833 183% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.75 100.406767564 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.4375 20.6045352989 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.45110844103 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272500641335 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117903513413 0.076458572812 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.131590715408 0.0737576698707 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194765552175 0.150856017488 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.09985925174 0.0645574589148 155% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 11.7677419355 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 58.1214874552 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.63 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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