Which of the following activities do you think will be the most beneficial to the environment? (1) Commute by biking or walking (2) Recycling (3) Eating a vegan diet
Some people argue that commute by biking or walking might not benefit the environment as it could seen as minute problem in front of many hazardous activities. However, I disagree with this stance for the following three reasons.
First of all, people are more likely to not consider the seriousness of effect on the environment of vehicles as it seen as a daily necessity. With increase population transportation requirement also increases as more and more people are willing to travel to their required destination which makes people rely on vehicles. For example, A person living far away from his work would more likely need any kind of transport to reach his office in time. In addition, vehicles have also became inexpensive, so more people are willing to afford to purchase a vehicle which increases the amount releasing harmful gases into air.
Second of all, Vehicles which run on battery might be seen as an alternative but even making these batteries would effect the environment in a in direct way. For example, making batteries require large amount of ores which are found in caves, these ores play a key role in the ecosystem but by extensive mining of them could result in damage to the environment. Even though alternative methods for making batteries without use of these ores are being researched but these usually take more time to fully develop, So by relying on biking or walking could minimize the damage being done to the environment.
Finally, By using biking or walking increases human overall health as these require physical activity which increases the blood circulation and concentration. For example, a person relying on driving is more likely to get less physical exercise and with increase in time would likely be more lethargic and have more health problems, Although some people using vehicles exercise daily and maintain good health without use of biking or walking,
but the amount of people following this routine are minute.
In conclusion, using biking or walking for transportation would only benefit the environment as it does not causes any activities which would damage the environment.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, second, so, for example, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 43.0788530466 37% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1794.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 349.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14040114613 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.703201126 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.47564469914 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 585.9 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.5139950364 48.9658058833 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.5 100.406767564 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0833333333 20.6045352989 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.16666666667 5.45110844103 168% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8709677419 25% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156605504282 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0689081929057 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0449775873458 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0950998174263 0.150856017488 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0373877895299 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 11.7677419355 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 58.1214874552 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.1575268817 156% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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