Which of the following values do you think is most important to teach to a young child?
Being honest or being helpful or being patient?
It is critically important that we raise our children properly. Personally, I believe it is very helpful to teach our children to be patient. I feel this way for two main reasons that will be explored in the ensuing paragraph.
To begin with, patient children are more likely to overcome struggles at school. In other words, a patient student will not give up when he faces academic challenges. Therefore, he will learn a lot in his classes. My compelling experience is an illustration of this concept. When I was in third grade, I struggled with math. To be specific, I couldn’t figure out how to do long division correctly on my own. At first, I wanted to give up and stop trying so hard. However, my mom encouraged me to stay patient and try again and again until I grasp the idea on my own. eventually, I could find the proper way to solve long division questions alone by myself. For this matter, I am grateful for my mom who taught me patience. If she didn’t encourage me to be patient and try again, I wouldn’t have learned how to solve these mathematical problems.
Also, raising our children to be patient teaches them financial independence. Patience instills the willpower to save money for a more secure future rather than spending money immediately on worthless stuff. For instance, when I was young, my parents used to give me and my brother a weekly allowance of 10 dollars. I used to spend my allowance on candy and junk food. My brother, on the other hand, would save his money in a bank account, because he wanted to buy a video game. In one year, his savings were enough to buy what he wanted. Consequently, he got this video game he always wanted to. Because he had the willpower to stay patient and didn’t spend his money on his immediate desires. Thus, teaching our children to be patient means planting an important financial skill in them from a young age
In conclusion, it is wise to bring up our children to be patient because it will help them in the future when they don’t give up easily and they would know how to save money for important stuff rather than meaningless things.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 567, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Eventually
...again until I grasp the idea on my own. eventually, I could find the proper way to solve l...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, however, if, so, still, therefore, third, thus, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, in other words, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1743.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 379.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59894459103 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65543392985 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.530343007916 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 536.4 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 57.7938452123 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.7826086957 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4782608696 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.95652173913 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18936029675 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0547422924787 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0809997546771 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141754690299 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0504337096368 0.0645574589148 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 11.7677419355 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.1 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.26 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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