Which one do you prefer? living in a nuclear family or an extended family?
There is much debate over whether a nuclear family or an extended family is better. I like extended family better because I am one an extended family members, I broadened my horizon by listen to my grandparent’s generation’s stories, learn from it and get more care by those relatives.
Above all, in an expended family unit, there always are elderly such as grandparents or even older people. Then I can get more knowledge about the symbolic history and their experiences. My grandparents are experienced. They went through the Chinese famine during 1959 to 1961. Especially my grandfather, he told me that when he was young, he lived in a poverty life. Also he went through the famine at the same time. It was difficult to survive so my grandfather went to begged to the richer people on the street with his grandmother. One day, his grandmother only got one dumpling, and she held back it to my grandfather. From this experience, I understood the general situation in the famine; also I learned the history from my grandfather’s oral express. After all I begin to cherish every meal in every single day.
Additionally, child can get more care by several relatives, like in a birthday, child can get more presents, and more people will attend to her/his party, which I think will be livelier. Moreover, if a child is sick, even without the parents, relatives will care the child as enough as they can. Take me for example, when I require several awards, my relatives will applaud for me. I can get the sense of accomplishment from them. In addition, when I am down, relatives will encourage me, which let my get impetus to keep doing work and work harder.
To illustrate, live with a bunch of people is a lively matter, because I can learn more positive personality, get more knowledge and get more concern. Therefore, I believe people should live in an extended family.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... was young, he lived in a poverty life. Also he went through the famine at the same ...
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Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...rom my grandfather's oral express. After all I begin to cherish every meal in ev...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, after all, for example, i think, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1572.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 325.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83692307692 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97579982784 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553846153846 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 508.5 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.1445998977 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.7368421053 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1052631579 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.94736842105 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208105456808 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0628558753257 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102236897804 0.0737576698707 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148242678694 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.127080723365 0.0645574589148 197% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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