Which one of the following values is the most important to share with a young child (ages 5 to 10)? Why?
Being helpful to others
Use specific examples and evidences to support your answer.
There is a heated debate among all of the society members who are concered about which value should be first shared with kids. Although some people adamantly claim that being well-organized individuals is the most important characterisitic, others hold an opposite point of view and suggest some other values like helping other people. Personally, I am of the opinion that being honest is a crucial attribute which should be learned at early ages. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, trustfulness is an essential factor in each successfull, stable relationship. Regarless of the kind of your relationship, when you are in contact with somebody, your partner expect you to tell the trust. This behavior needs to be learned as soon as possible since the human has created as a social animal and he is always seeking for more communication. Children, like all the humans, need to have stable relations with others, for instance with their peers, so they should be honest from early ages. For example, I can remember when my younger brother was five years old, he had no friend since he used to tell lie to other people. As my mother saw his state, she confered with a councelor and he told her to learn my brother how important telling the tust is. My mother tried hard for several months. Fortunately, my brother changed his way and learned this important issue. After that he had a myrial of friends surrounding him. This experience tought me that this value is needed even for a kid.
Second, telling no lie is an innate feature existed in kids and it just needs some impetus to enhance it to follow this route whole the life. Despite my brother’s experience, this assertion is true for most people. For example, in our family, we all try hard to be loyal as much as possible. Even my brother, who I described his story, know the importance of the loyalty. It is because my parents pay attention to much on their children’s behaviors.
All in all, from my perspective, being honest is the value which should be learned and enhanced as the first positive characteristic. However, I don’t overlook the importance of other values like being organized or kindness. Therefore, I suggest more serveys to prove which claim is closer to reality and results in better outcomes.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 32, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
There is a heated debate among all of the society members who are concered about ...
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Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...debate among all of the society members who are concered about which value should be fi...
Line 2, column 892, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...s way and learned this important issue. After that he had a myrial of friends surroun...
Line 3, column 416, Rule ID: TO_TOO
Message: Did you mean 'too'?
... It is because my parents pay attention to much on their children's behaviors...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, second, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, i feel, kind of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1944.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 402.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83582089552 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76454907997 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557213930348 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 597.6 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.9139957586 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.3636363636 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2727272727 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.31818181818 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162411353673 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0483888174745 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0391588648364 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11469867156 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0582030961362 0.0645574589148 90% => OK
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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