Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun to play games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time to do things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Obviously, it is so important to assign some time to our family even we were so busy doing a lot of tasks. This is more staple in kids' lives because they have a more sensitive temperament than older people and need more attention. Discussing this issue, some individuals adamantly claim that it would be more efficient to spend time together doing their assignments, however, others disagree. Personally, I am of the opinion that spending time with our kids would be more joyful if we do some funny group activities like playing soccer, dancing, going to an amusement park and so on. I believe that children would be influenced by those activities and remember them better. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First, kids always seek interesting and innovative acting. If we help our kids doing their home works, they think that their parents are their second educators or tutors. Accordingly, no emotional relationship would make through this act and eventually they will lose their unlimited affection. For instance, my uncle is a mathematics professor and teaches in our town university, at science department. He is really busy with his graduate student since he is the best teacher in the university. While he has achieved a lot of awards in his life, his major problem is interacting with his young son. When his son was a little boy, my uncle just focused on his son's studies and always helped him to be the best student among his classmates. Although his son is attending at Oxford University which is one of the best schools in the world, they cannot communicate with each other properly. As they didn't have any emotional relation together, the sequence is unfortunately clear. That's why creating common feeling is better.
Second, younger people learn better and easier through playing so if we want to learn something to our kids it would be better to incorporate it into an entertaining action. By doing so we would have a great time together, and we educate our kids as well. For example, I have a seven years old son who is so intelligent in mathematics and so interested in observing animals and insects. So when I have some leisure time, we go to the zoo or safari park to see new animals which we didn't see them before. When we are in such places, we can enjoy spending time together, as well as, I can practice mathematics with my son by counting the number of deer or flowers. We always remember those time as the best days of our lives.
All in all, I prefer to do amused activities with my kid instead of doing his home work in his room.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, first, however, if, really, second, so, well, while, for example, for instance, i feel, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2153.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 459.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69063180828 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64162275676 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527233115468 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 677.7 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.8345301137 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.6086956522 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9565217391 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.82608695652 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27069724693 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0757409653926 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0577577331513 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156090429557 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.058656138255 0.0645574589148 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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