Which one of the following values is the most important
to share with a young child (5-10 years old)?
1.being helpful
2.Being honest
3.Being well organized
Without a shadow of doubt, appreciated values play a prominent role in every individual’s life. Although some people might believe that young children do not need to know about valuable principals, others possess the conviction that it is good for children at age 5-10 learn about morals such as being helpful, being truthful, and being well-organized. As far as I am concerned, being helpful is a cardinal value that children should know and practice it. I will elaborate on my viewpoint through the following paragraphs.
First of all, one should take into account that mankind is a social creature, and needs to be a part of a society. Having a helpful characteristic in one’s personality helps young people to be more eager to communicate with others, have feelings of sympathy, feel more confident in their relationships, and relay on others during their lives. A recent study in Germany indicates that the more children at young age are taught to be helpful, the more socially active they become. This survey was done in a kindergarten in a small town, in which caring for family and friends is a cultural value, and it is appreciated in their educational system. It was a five-year research program, and the results showed that those children who were regularly encouraged to help others, were 62% more socially active than others. According to the results of this study, it is obvious that realizing the meaning of being helpful have positive influence on children’s social behaviors.
The second reason that I would like to mention is that sharing a valuable concept such as being helpful, teaches young people to be responsible for other as well. Take a personal experience as an example: back to the time that I was a seven-year old little girl, my mother told a story of her childhood, the way she took care of her younger brother when he was sick, while she had to study hard for exams. She helped him only because she loved him. I kept thinking that although my mother was not responsible for her brother’s illness, she felt that she should help him anyway. Since that time, I try to consider others, specially my loved ones, and help them if needed, no matter what is going on in my life.
To sum up, I firmly believe that being sharing tenet values like being helpful is required for children in age 5-10 because it leads them to be more socially active, and I recommend to parents and all adults who are dealing with young children to share this principle with them, and help them to understand the meaning of this concept by showing them how it is like to be a helpful person
Transition Words or Phrases used:
anyway, first, if, second, so, well, while, such as, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 15.1003584229 219% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2166.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 453.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78145695364 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61343653406 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73789782127 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514348785872 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 663.3 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 81.8437678981 48.9658058833 167% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.375 100.406767564 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.3125 20.6045352989 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.75 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187304771865 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0580187435518 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0495097104787 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120810747082 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0382450505965 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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