which one is more important to you for having an enjoyable vacation?
good friends
good accommodation
good foods
In today’s modern world, people have serious and exhausting jobs in order to have a good life. However, doing these kinds of jobs makes life very boring, and people usually get tired after several weeks or months. One of the popular activities that bring joy and happiness to life is going on vacation. People on vacation get away from their work environments and release themselves from their stresses. Also, for several days, they can relax their minds and bodies. There are different viewpoints about the most important factor to have an enjoyable vacation. While some believe that the quality of food is a significant factor in a good vacation, others think that enjoying nice accommodation is the basic one. As far as I am concerned, having good friends is a pivotal factor in a nice vacation. The reasons why I believe so will be elaborated upon hereunder.
First of all, if people go on vacations with their friends, they will have a great time. I mean, they always talk to each other and spend their time joking and even playing, which makes them forget about passing time. For instance, a few months ago, I and some of my close friends went on a vacation. We went to a nice village near the city and stayed there for two days. Unfortunately, as we arrived there, the rain began to fall. Although the weather was really bad and no one could enjoy the scenery that we went for, we simply talked together and played cards. We had such a good time together that it became one of our favorite memories.
Second, some unpredicted situations may happen on a trip, and if people go with their friends, they can use their experiences and knowledge. Because different people have been in various circumstances, they can help each other in unforeseen predicaments. My own experience demonstrates this reality. Five years ago, I decided to go to the forest near Anzali-which is a beautiful city in the north of Iran-for a couple of days, and two of my friends came with me. One day, I climbed a tree to collect some fruits, but one of the branches broke and I fell off. I broke my hand and some of my ribs. Fortunately, my friends where with me and they were familiar with first aid. They stopped the bleeding and took me to the hospital. If they were not with me, or if they were not familiar with medical care, I would die that day.
In conclusion, with all this taken into account, I strongly believe that having good friends on vacation is more important than things like food or accommodation. Because when people go with their friends, they will have fun. Also, if something bad happens, they can count on each other. I think it would be no exaggeration if I state that having good friends on a vacation will make it rememberable.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, really, second, so, while, for instance, i mean, i think, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2254.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 487.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62833675565 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69766713281 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5863529554 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509240246407 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 697.5 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 9.59856630824 219% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.6171704613 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.724137931 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7931034483 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.1724137931 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281561375638 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.071459627694 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0849420520773 0.0737576698707 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188381574717 0.150856017488 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0929632648655 0.0645574589148 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 11.7677419355 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.99 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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