It is thoroughly accepted that students are in pursuit of friends. As a result, they usually search for effective ways to find friends. From my viewpoint, among many available approaches for forming new friendships, the best way is to join a sports team.
To begin with, not only can athletes spend a long time per week with their teammates, but also they have a lot of common topics to talk about with each other. Sports teams usually have regular times to get together, exercise, and prepare for their competitions. With these strict plans, members can’t delay the meetings for their outdoor tasks or exams. Therefore, they spend most of their time together. On the other hand, by joining a sports team, you will have the same profits as other members, sometimes working as competitors for practicing and sometimes as teammates for defeating the rivals. You will learn from your teammates or help them improve, and after a while, you will have a mutual friendship. For example, when I was a newcomer in high school, it was hard for me to become intimate with people. I had many things to do and didn’t pay attention to the importance of making friendships at school. After a while, due to depression, I joined the school’s basketball team. I saw my teammates three times a week preparing for inter-school competitions and spending a lot of time having fun in the break times. We talked about our goals and how to achieve them, and this approach completely eradicated my shyness. We also talked about different topics after the times we were together, and our friendship started. In summary, spending a lot of time with my teammates and having many common issues for talking formed my friendships.
Secondly, a sports team can help students achieve a strong sense of connectivity and solidarity with each other so that they can quickly start friendships in such an environment. Most of the time, sports teams are organized to win a competition. This shared goal allows the students to try their best to achieve their targets. To race with other groups, the team members should learn to cooperate and collaborate with each other and adapt to their teammates’ characteristics. This is the definition of solidarity. In other words, when the team encounters some obstacles, the team members try to reach a final solution together, and this explained connectivity for solving the sudden difficulties helps them get close to each other. For example, when I was on my high school basketball team, one of my teammates fell in a game and hurt her leg. Whether we were friends with that person or not, all of the members tried to help her get better. We called the doctor, made some sweet drink, held her out of the field, and tried to comfort her. On the other hand, we tried our best to win the game so that she didn’t feel ashamed or sad because of the obstacle. As a result, we got closer to each other, strengthened the sense of solidarity, and stroke up new friendships. In conclusion, by increasing this sense of alliance and being more intimate, students will easily make new friends in their sports teams.
To wrap it up, although there are many ways to make new friends for students, it seems that joining a sports team is the best one. First of all, being on a sports team helps students spend a lot of time with their teammates and share many common topics. And secondly, sports teams help students share a feeling of connectivity and incorporation, making it easier for them to start friendships.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 894, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...e were friends with that person or not, all of the members tried to help her get better. W...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, in summary, as a result, first of all, in other words, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 85.0 52.1666666667 163% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2916.0 1977.66487455 147% => OK
No of words: 606.0 407.700716846 149% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81188118812 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.96155895361 4.48103885553 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71013368332 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 275.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.453795379538 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 855.0 618.680645161 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.86738351254 482% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 14.0 4.94265232975 283% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.1869767489 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.064516129 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5483870968 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.90322580645 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 11.8709677419 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248789401238 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.075946413385 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0797045449039 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210674501943 0.150856017488 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0800791783797 0.0645574589148 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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