Movies and televisions have a fundamental role in modern society, in a way that we can consider them as indirect instructors. Due to the unavoidable effects of movies and televisions on society, many people believe that films and televisions should depict good people are rewarded and bad people are punished. In my opinion, this is always the best approach for a couple of reasons.
To begin with, the first striking point is that young people, like children and teenagers, are directly affected by TV shows and movies. As an undeniable truth, we can never stop children from watching TV and other films because they are the easiest and safest way to entertain them, especially when the parents are busy with their works. When these youngsters start to watch these programs, they usually love the most successful and attractive characters. This kind of love and respect may result in that they imitate the role in the movie. So if the evil people who usually are the most attractive and smart ones aren’t punished, those teenagers will think that being in their shoes is the best way to become successful. Then, they will repeat the character’s destructive behaviors. In conclusion, as the most impressive audience, teenagers and children may believe the imaginary screenplay, which can negatively affect their upbringing.
Secondly, as I previously explained, TV and movies have an instructive role in the community. Most people spend at least three hours a day watching TV. Therefore, televisions and movies can create various senses for different people. These senses can unconsciously affect people’s attitudes toward important subjects or change their beliefs. As a result, televisions should consistently demonstrate the truth and that what goes around comes around. If people got to watch movies that show bad people as heroes and who are always the winners at the end, over time, wrong behaviors would be considered excellent in people’s minds. They think these terrible habits, as everyday actions, will not have any unpleasant outcomes for them, so they start to do them. In other words, abnormalities changes to norms and vice versa. In summary, TV and movies are two effective ways to change people’s thoughts, and if they go wrong, they can have irreparable effects on society.
To wrap it up, the imitation of youngsters from leading roles in the movies and the TV’s instructive role in people’s lives lead us to conclude that films and televisions should always show that good people are rewarded and happy and bad people are ashamed and punished at the end.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 569, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'usually' is usually put after the verb 'are'.
Suggestion: are usually
...in the movie. So if the evil people who usually are the most attractive and smart ones aren...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, at least, in conclusion, in summary, kind of, as a result, in my opinion, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2177.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 423.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14657210402 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74381022349 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524822695035 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 647.1 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.0937607939 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.85 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.15 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.9 5.45110844103 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.375624302871 0.236089414692 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102728244095 0.076458572812 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.151451749078 0.0737576698707 205% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.30101283149 0.150856017488 200% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.17270350563 0.0645574589148 268% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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