while visiting a foreign country would you choose a country with traditions and quiet or a country with country with tourists attractions
By and large, it is established beyond doubt that with the advent of technology and advancement in society, people thrive to pace themselves with the fast moving world. Vividly, their lives are full of hard worka and strenuous efforts to earn money in order to keep their lives more luxurious and relaxing. In this regard, travelling is of paramount importnace. There are different schools of thoughts amongst people . where some consider to take their vaccation to foreign country, others contemplate to explore their own countries culture at a quiet place. If i were asked, I would subscribe to the latter idea. In what follows, I will delve into most crucial reasons to substantiate my viewpoint.
The first reason corroborating my idea is associated with the notion that travelling to quiet place of one's own country entails plethora of advantages. To be more specific, people are thriving hard in their live, so providing themselves with relaxation is everyone aim for. it is noticeable that people gets few vaccations during the whole year, wasting those vaccation at a place where the whole time spend in commuting and recovering from jet lag is not sufficient. On the other hand , every country is full of tradiations and vibrant cultures. It is axiomatic that not all the individuals have explored their traditions fully. For the way of illustartion, my own country, pakistan is enriched with naturalk beauty and mant foreighners came to eplore them. I got on diffrent places to cherish the beauty of my country, its been a decade but i Srtill have places to travel.When I go to the places which are close to natural beauty, I feel my all burdens are away and forgets all the worries of my life. It is crytal clear to see their visiting own country in most beneficial.
The second compelling reason behind my opinion is rooted in the fact that tarvelling to a foreign country is not affordable for everyone. It is worth mentioning that with the development in society, people living standrads get high too. In that circumstances, it is extremely burdensome to plan a foreighn trip. Moreover, if people plan that trip it is not usually relaxing because mostly the tourist spots in foreign countries are crowded and expese reach skyrockets there. My brother experience is a compelling example of this. Last year, he finally fulfilled his wish to go to Niagra fallsafter doing saving for five years. He had thought that his trip would be relaxing and he would have experince of life. Unfortunetley, he could not relax and enjoy his trip their because of expenses and crowd. IF he had planned his trip to our country, he wouyld have saved the money and relaxed more.
By perusing above paragraphs , one can infer that travelling to a quiet atmosphere of own country is more profitable. For the sake of brevity, few points are worth reiterating. First, visiting own country traditional is more beneficial. Second, visiting a foreign country is niether ecconomically efficent nor relaxing
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, moreover, second, so, i feel, by and large, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 15.1003584229 199% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2491.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 501.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97205588822 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73107062784 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81103601914 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 267.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532934131737 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 774.9 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.4432257093 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.9642857143 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8928571429 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.07142857143 5.45110844103 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269412283528 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0728678302261 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.080093285716 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181910422137 0.150856017488 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0560089410889 0.0645574589148 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.25 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 86.8835125448 142% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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