it is better to work as a team than individually for success
.agree disagee
By and large, it is established beyond doubt that with the advancement and developement in society, every one is trying to raise its social status and progress in society. In this regard, working strnously in an community is of parmount importance. As humans are social animal, they cannot progress without interaction with each other. There are different schools of thoughts amongst scholars , where some consider that working independently leads them to success, others contemplate that working in a team is essantial for their prosperity. If I were asked, I would subscribe to the idea of working in a team. In what follows, I will delve to substantiate my viewpoint.
The first reason corroborating my idea ins associated with the notion that when people are working together they encourages each other to work hard. To be more specific, in certain circumstances when people are working alone , they get idle because of lack of motivation. As a result, their learning process in hindered. It is axiomatic that ther are different capabilities of intelligence in a team. It is probable that person who has weaknesses needs motivation and assistance from others, people working in a group help their fellow members which entails two advatages. Fisrt, people who receive help get motivation to work hard and their problems are solved. Second, people who are hekping others feels confidence on their knowledge and satisfaction that they get better use of their abilities by helping others. Consequently, the whole team lead to success. By the way of illustration, I was watching a local show on televison yesterday where the host was conducting intervieews with office workers. Majority of the people were convinced that working as a group was successful because of better leraning opportunities.
The second compelling reason behind my opinion is rooted in the fact that people working in a team learn important skills. To be more specific, they encounter problems, that teach them problem solving. Moreover, people learn leadershil skill, organizational skill their life become more discpiled. This is all becuase working as a team is noithing like working individually in soltitude. It is said that intelligence wins the games, but teamwork wins the championship. It is worth mentioning that when people are working together they come more stronger and a solid unbreakable wall. It is crystal clear that with all above mentioned skills poeple will be nothing more than a successful person in his life.
By perusing above paragraphs, one can infer that works as a team is valuable experience for success in life. For the sake of brevity, few points are worth reiterating. First, working together provides an opportunity to enhance learning through motivation. Second, team work teaches perso many important life skills that contribute to their future success.. As for writer's opinin I vehemently urge people to work collectively to achieve their goals.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, if, moreover, second, so, as for, as a result, by and large, by the way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 15.1003584229 199% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 24.0 11.0286738351 218% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2483.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 472.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26059322034 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6610686524 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93057719274 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533898305085 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 763.2 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.825929559 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.6785714286 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8571428571 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.46428571429 5.45110844103 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1810805555 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0512942379987 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0525015548908 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114008299059 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0266581046263 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.93 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 86.8835125448 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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