:Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
By and large, it is established beyond doubt that with the dawn of human civilization, parents are thriving hard to improve circumstances and striving strenuously to upgrade the living standard of their children. Vividly, taking out time from their hectic schedule is not a piece of cake. In this regard, parents' role is of paramount importance in instilling morals and ethics in their children. There are different schools of thought among parents. where some contemplate that assisting their children in their schoolwork is beneficial, Others reckon that spending a variety of time doing fun and play is more valuable. As for this writer's opinion, I would champion the notion of spending time with children while playing games and sports. In what follows, I will delve into the most crucial reasons to substantiate my viewpoint.
The first compelling reason corroborating my stance is associated with the idea that play is immensely important for the development and growth of children. To be more specific, when children are playing with their parents, it strengthens the relationship between families and creates an unbreakable bond.IT is also worth mentioning, that in plays children learn many important skills. they learn how to show patience by taking turns, how to share,and how to behvae in a well-mannered way. In all that play, surveillance of an adult is extremely important. Children often frustrate and parents are the right people to teach them how to overcome their anxiety and stress. Psychologists have even discovered that play helps children to express their inner emotions and disruptive behavior. By the way of illustration, last week, my son got little upset on some matter, I noticed that my son started to build with the blocks and while he was playing he was crashing his block tower.Its clear that he is taking out his destructive behavior through play. I was right there to help him to manage his emotions. My example clearly manifests that My presence in his plays is crucial for his learning.
The second rationale behind my opinion is rooted in the fact that when parents plaY sports with their children, they are nourishing their children's physical and mental health. It is also notable that it creates a strong bond between them. My opinion on this matter is greatly influenced by my personal example. For the last five years, I and my husband spend our free time with our son playing basketball. Since we started playing the game with him we have seen an astonishing difference in his school performance. Not only his mental capabilities are enhanced, but also he lost his weight and become physically active too. This is crystal clear that playing sports with children has the innumerable advantage for their health.
By perusing above paragraphs, one can infer that we should let our children experience their life with fun and playing, and life is certainly not all about books. For the sake of brevity, few points are worth reiterating. First, children learn many important skills by playing g and having fun. Second, sports in critically important for their physical and mental health.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, still, then, well, while, as for, by and large, by the way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 76.0 43.0788530466 176% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2615.0 1977.66487455 132% => OK
No of words: 514.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08754863813 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76146701107 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74395013909 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 269.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523346303502 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 762.3 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.2449861141 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.8518518519 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.037037037 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.40740740741 5.45110844103 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249803528868 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0707707126826 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0674501916719 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169084943975 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.058880153282 0.0645574589148 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 86.8835125448 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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