It is better for people to choose jobs that come with high salaries even though they do not enjoy doing it than to choose jobs that they enjoy but come with low salaries.
By and large, it is established beyond doubt that the advancement and modernization of the world, competition to raise the status is immensely increased. In this regard, jobs that people do are of paramount impotance.. Vividly, individuals do jobs to survive and thrive in their lives. There are different schools of thought among the people, where some reckon to do job that they love but heve low salaries.On the other hand, some people contemplate the importance of money and chose a high salary job even though they do not enjoy doing it. As for this writer's opinion, I would agree with the notion of selecting a high salary job though i do not enjoy doing it. In what follows, I will delve into the most crucial reasons to substantiate my viewpoint.
The first compelling rationale behind my reason is rooted in the fact that money plays an integral role in people life, when they have money they will feel contentment and satisfaction in life. Since high slaray jobs will provide the people with high income they could raise the status of their living and could easily fulfill the needs of their loved ones. It is worth mentioning, that human is a social animal and he has to build realtionships with other and its family. Therefore, when every one's need will be fulfilled the relationship will grew stronger. By the way of illustartion. Five years ago, when i was doing the job that I love, as an artist, I could not make enough money. As a result, my families felt dissatisfied with me, then I switched my job and started working as a pharmacist. That brough a huge change in my life. As I could easily afford all the expenses and is able to buy my favourite car and a brand new house. Not only, i could fulfil my needd but my realion with my family got stronger too as their needs are fulfilled too. Now, they seem more satisfied with me. My example clearly manifest that money bring satisfaction in life.
The second exquisite reason corroborating my idea is associated with the notion that when people are doing the job that gives them low salaries, they suffer in their life. Even though they start their job because they love doing it, but they end up being unhappy and sad. This is due to the reason that in this contemporary world, money makes mare to go, if people donot have money they will become a failure. As a case in my mind to shed some light, Last year one of my cousin got divorced. Thereason behind the divorce was that his family was not happy with him as he could not provide them with the basic need of their lives. He was so much eager to do the job that he loved doing, and was not willing to change it even though his fmaily wanted him to earn more.Consequently, my cousin is utmost unhappy now in his life because he had to go through such a big loss because of his low slary job. If he had done a high slary job that he dont love, his family would have been with him and he would have been happy.
By perusing the above paragraphs, one can infer that though people could do the job that they love, doing a high slary job has innumerable advantages. For the sake of brevity, few points are worth reiterating. First, it will bring contentment and satisfaction in people's life when they fulfil the needs of them and their families. Second, without money even if people enjoy their job they would not stay happy.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, if, second, so, then, therefore, as for, as to, as a result, by and large, by the way, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 9.8082437276 214% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 95.0 43.0788530466 221% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2738.0 1977.66487455 138% => OK
No of words: 608.0 407.700716846 149% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.50328947368 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.9656475924 4.48103885553 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46220566108 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 271.0 212.727598566 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.445723684211 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 848.7 618.680645161 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 12.0 3.51792114695 341% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.816746539 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.4137931034 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9655172414 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.48275862069 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.360826298362 0.236089414692 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106597007021 0.076458572812 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110463213923 0.0737576698707 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.279591147124 0.150856017488 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106620702738 0.0645574589148 165% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.82 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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