Who enjoy their life more, old people or young people?
Some people think that old people enjoy their life more than young people. They cite this reason based on the fact that old people are carefree in their life and they do not have any expectations from themselves as they already have achieved so much. However, in my opinion, young people enjoy their life more as compared to old ones. I believe this because of following two reasons.
Firstly, young people are very much active and energetic. It is very important that a person is active so that he or she doesn’t have any problem while trying to have some good times with friends. For example, last summer I was on a trip with my family. There was a small hill on the way, so we decided to climb it as it was not very high and steep. I was one of the most active and energetic member in my family while my grandparents were not. Although, they wanted to do the hill climbing so much , they could not because of their back problem which arised as they got old. I am sure although they did enjoyed their trip with us but there were many things including hill climbing that would have made their trip much more enjoyable and interesting if they were not old.
Secondly, young people are able to make friends much easily than older people do. Friendship is one of the most important factors which define our enjoyment. It is said that " a sad person is a one who don’t have any friends ".With this saying, it can be said that a person who has the ability to make more friends is likely to enjoy more than those who don’t because the first person can easily socialize with people and can make friends easily even in new places. For example, in my solo trip to Germany last year , I was able to socialize with so many people of my age over there which made my trip so much interesting and enjoyable that I had expected. This would not have been possible if I was a old person. I would not have been able to make much friends because of the reason that young people are reluctant in socializing with old people.
To conclude, deciding whether young people or old people enjoy their life more is a complex topic . Although, many people believe that old people enjoy their life more, I still think that young people are the one who enjoy more because they are much active and energetic and they can socialize with others easily as compared to old ones.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, while, for example, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1942.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 434.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.47465437788 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.24281276337 2.67179642975 84% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.391705069124 0.524837075471 75% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 620.1 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.774423488 48.9658058833 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.210526316 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8421052632 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05263157895 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.494485287263 0.236089414692 209% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.202611107312 0.076458572812 265% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.231406331554 0.0737576698707 314% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.421501619421 0.150856017488 279% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.230358120285 0.0645574589148 357% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.94 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.73 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 86.8835125448 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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