Why city should build an indoor park
By and larger, it is beyond that during this contemporary period people travel a lot for pleasure and business purposes. In this regard, building massive and appealing architectures is of paramount importance. There has been no shortage of debates among scholars whether the government should invest to build a historical museum or a shopping mall. As for the writer's opinion, I subscribe to the idea of constructing an indoor amusement park in my city to captivate people from all around the world. In what follows, I will delve into the most crucial reasons to substantiate my viewpoint.
The first compelling reason corroborating my opinion is the fact that building especially an indoor park is a big investment which will attract the profound businessmen of the world. It is notable that today, great investors are in society and looking for big and interesting projects to invest their money in. An indoor park demands more expenses as compared to a regular outdoor amusement park due to the kind of closed structure and providing all the facilities indoor at a specific height building. It is worth mentioning that this kind of massive plan enchant not only the businessmen but also the tourists all over the world because tourists want something different now. Vividly the mentioned point can only be achieved by constructing an indoor park. By way of illustration, 5 years ago, an indoor park namely the American dream mall was built in New Jersey. Its building is huge and composed of 4 different sections including a water park, skiing, ice skating, and rides. It was all over in the news that famous businessmen have invested in it. Well, when I visited this park, I was stunned by how they developed the structure beautifully. They even had a huge roller coaster ride. No doubt why it attracted so many tourists because of its unique structure. That's why I highly recommend cities to build such indoor parks.
The second rationale behind my suggestion is rooted in the fact that people plan their vacations according to the weather so an indoor park will be their top priority in winters. During winters, there are not many adventurous activities for kids and even adults to do except bowling and skiing, etc. Thus, building an indoor park containing a variety of amusements really alleviates the boredom during cold weather. Also, people visit outdoor amusement parks only in summer because in winter it is so cold that no one prefers to go there. It is crystal clear that indoor parks will be in business throughout the year as the weather will not stop tourists to go there. As a case in mind, I also go to the American dream mall every winter with my kids to have memorable winter fun. As it is enclosed and protects us from getting worried about cold and snow.
By perusing the above paragraphs, one can infer that although the museum is an educational facility for not only tourists but also the students, tourists prefer adventurous places, for instance, parks. For the sake of brevity, a couple of reasons are worth reiterating: first, it is a big project for businessmen, secondly, despite of any weather tourists are still able to enjoy. As for the writer's advice, I vehemently urge people to think to build more indoor amusemant parks in their cities so that they can enjoy upto the maximum.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, really, second, secondly, so, still, thus, well, as for, for instance, kind of, no doubt, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2760.0 1977.66487455 140% => OK
No of words: 565.0 407.700716846 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88495575221 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87542086881 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68937805578 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 284.0 212.727598566 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502654867257 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 855.9 618.680645161 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1362998383 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.222222222 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9259259259 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.81481481481 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.377787680019 0.236089414692 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0966776389411 0.076458572812 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10009235864 0.0737576698707 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217295789352 0.150856017488 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0869692782769 0.0645574589148 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 86.8835125448 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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