Nowadays, with the development of personal independence, people are braver to express their true feelings and opinions. Recently, there is a heated debate on whether individuals should state their honest thoughts even though most other people disagree, some people claim that people should be in accordance with most people. As for me, I believe that we should always say our honest opinion out, especially considering the benefits to people’s personality and group’s improvement.
Firstly, being honest all the time is more likely to bring inner peace, especially when one encounters prevalent objections. This is because, when a person thinks differently from most people, it usually means that the idea may be more their true thoughts, but not consistent with social norms, like having a stable job or building a family not too late, that the society expects us to be. Thus, being brave and making your thoughts known helps clarify who you are, and what you truly want to do in the future. Take me for example, when I wanted to quit my job as a teacher and started my own business last year, almost all my family members and friend express their concern and suggested I think twice. The reason is obvious----being a teacher enjoys a stable income and a decent status, which cannot be ensured by building my own career, particularly when the general economic environment is bad. Patiently listening to them listing pros and cons, I was determined to do my career, because I know what truly motivated me was to create anything that I value most rather than to follow others’ instructions without meticulous examinations. In the end, I told my family my real thoughts, surprisingly, when I made my ideas clear, I found that my family was not as opposed to them at first, and I was more firmly committed to working for my choice.
Furthermore, people stating their real ideas can help a group or a teacher to find out their flaws and also provide some fresh thoughts. To be specific, some people just follow teachers or authorities blindly, even though they make some mistakes, people believe them with all their heart instead of thinking critically and pointing it out, which is quite harmful to the teachers, schools, and even societies’ improvement. For example, when I was in college, I took a class called Art History, the teacher was talking about the artist Matisse, and introduced us to some normal facts about him. However, when I appreciated his work, I found a strong relationship between his work and music, which was not mentioned in the teacher’s lecture. As a result, I stated my opinion in class, and the teacher and most of my classmates thought I was trying to steal the spotlight. Nevertheless, after searing for related resources to back the statement, figuring out every thought that may call into question, and sorting ideas into a logical way, at last, I gave a lecture about the topic that music have strong effects on Matisse’s painting, with all my research information, the teacher and classmates were impressed. This fresh idea also provided us with a new point of view on understanding Matisse’s artworks.
In conclusion, from what has been discussed above, I still maintain that people should state their true thoughts even though most people oppose them.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, still, thus, as for, as to, even so, for example, i think, in conclusion, talking about, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2758.0 1977.66487455 139% => OK
No of words: 552.0 407.700716846 135% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99637681159 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84713113593 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76675928512 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 299.0 212.727598566 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541666666667 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 819.9 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.51792114695 284% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.2087644492 48.9658058833 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 153.222222222 100.406767564 153% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.6666666667 20.6045352989 149% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.77777777778 5.45110844103 179% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25023113442 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0797330094013 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0677616399387 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166208801819 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0662780679751 0.0645574589148 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 11.7677419355 149% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 86.8835125448 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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