Young people enjoy life more than old people do
This topic raises the controversial issue of whether a young person enjoys life more than older people do or not. As per Mr Marvin, a professor at IMT University, enjoyment does not depend upon age." It means enjoyment depends upon the personality of the person rather than age. Personally, I disagree with this context. I feel this for two reasons, which I will explore in the following ways.
To begin with, In modern's world, the sudden demise of young adults due to cardiac arrest is triple than the previous decade. There are so many factors for cardiac arrest and one of the factors is taking tension of little things. Let us look at the instance of my personal experience. My friend Raman was demised on 25th August 2018 due to cardiac arrest at the age of 25. He was worried about the politics engaged in employer entity. One day, he was punished for calculating the wrong taxation of the company. However, he had no role in such a big mistake. This was happened due to politics in such Company. Such a mistake made him low. He did not enjoy his life. Thus, Working culture in most of the companies is so bad that most of the young adults feel worried about their future and such worried lead them not to enjoy their life.
In addition, there are three phases of human life. One is a child, second is adult and third is old. on the basis of enjoyment parameter, In most of the researches, it is found that the old phase is the best phase of a human life unless they have a dangerous illness. Let us look at the metaphor of Old society magazine, In which an article was published about the different phase of human life. The said magazine gave his conclusion that older are more billion in the case of happiness. The author concluded on the basis of three factors 1. Stability as old life is more stable than the other two phases. 2. No tension regarding schedule works Older ones. 3.less responsibility towards their kids.
In Conclusion, Although Adult life is the best phase in case of many factors such as married life, college life, job life, friends life. However, Working life is that factor which changes the momento towards young people to older people. It means due to working life factor, Young people feel not happier.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, regarding, second, so, third, thus, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1850.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 401.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61346633416 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38106169428 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.503740648379 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 579.6 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.509000096 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 68.5185185185 100.406767564 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.8518518519 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.18518518519 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.346215396703 0.236089414692 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0803236960962 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110270796301 0.0737576698707 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209326037618 0.150856017488 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0805421737292 0.0645574589148 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.7 11.7677419355 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 58.1214874552 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.87 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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