Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
As an educator, this topic is controversial to me. This context is also aired in late-night debate program of fox channel where major scholars did oppose this context. Now, one may ask why major scholars opposed this context? There are so many reasons to it but most notably formal education helps us to think beyond what we can not expect. Additionally, formal education is an education given under some education authority board. It wholly depends upon the curriculum adopted by the education authority. If the curriculum is varying as per the external environment, students are getting updated education which set them free to think about some theory. Thus, I disagree with this context.
first of all, I would like to point out that informal education does not provide any personal coach. It means, if I have a doubt in some topic of math then without a teacher(coach) I will not be able to find out the answer. Moreover, Coach does not provide the answer but provides the technique. For more clarification, let us look at the example of Mr Anand Kumar, professor of Math, he believes in informal education, however, it did not give you 100% result. the foremost characteristic of formal education is discipline. A student is not able to think beyond its capacity if he does not follow the discipline principles.
Secondly, a Training programme is a part of formal education, where Trainer gives the first instruction to their trainees to think freely. for clearance of doubts, Let us look at the metaphor of Institute of Company Secretaries of India. It is a prestigious institute which is focused on good corporate governance. A student may become a member of ICSI, after clearing 3 levels of programme conducted by ICSI itself. As per the curriculum of ICSI, a training programme of 15 months is compulsory for every student. The training programme helps the students to think practically and how to deal with a particular situation.
In conclusion, although informal education helps the students to think deeply on the various subject, however, such thinking may be on the wrong side, so these students need a mentor who helps them to tailor the thinking into the right side. As per Mr.Jacob, former professor of British council, formal education is just like a tailor who tailoring the thinking capacity of the students in the right mode
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, thus, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 14.8657303371 20% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1974.0 2235.4752809 88% => OK
No of words: 394.0 442.535393258 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01015228426 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82967037847 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53807106599 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 614.7 704.065955056 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.8500025337 60.3974514979 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.7272727273 118.986275619 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9090909091 23.4991977007 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.13636363636 5.21951772744 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.122361613255 0.243740707755 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0377386456968 0.0831039109588 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0565136873871 0.0758088955206 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0700614736814 0.150359130593 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0500744823208 0.0667264976115 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 100.480337079 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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