Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
Education is the basis of our society and culture and knowing the most basic aspects is a very essential portion of each individual's lives. The author deems that formal education works as a hindrance to creative minds and obstructs the perception of freedom. He or she implies that without formal education, one's mind can enable more freedom of their spirits and mentality. I strongly disagree with this notion and contend that formal education does not restrain our minds and spirits for two reasons.
Freedom is a concept that was very unfamiliar in the archaic days. For many individual's, oppression was a significant obstruction in their lives, restraining all forms of personal opinions and thoughts. The reception of education and voting rights, or rather the lack of, and discrimination were a few of these factors. In the 20th century, African Americans were discriminated against and sold as property. They were denied education while yearning desperately to gain knowledge. Such tactics are still currently being emulated in the country of India with many women who are being sold off into "slavery" in the form of a conjugal agreement. These individual's desire the right for a formal education. If such education was contraining, then why do the people who lack it feel more restrained than those who have access to it. Ironically, such information would not even be known and would be swept under the rug, eventually dying down, if it were not for formal education reterating such historical and current events. As history, politics, and current events are a portion included in formal education, in order for indviduals to carry out themselves freely, it is essential they have knowledge and
gratefullness of their freedom and how it impacted those in the past and how it affects those surrounding them currently.
Formal Education is the alphabet of a career. Without such knowledge, the quality of a person's career, job, or even daily life might be attenuated. Rather or not the career is a profession that involved ten years of assiduous studying or two years of lax studying, both involve formal education which contributed to their success and efficacy. Even a painter, whose mind might be considered free and creative, which many might assume might not need formal education, would still need to possess the discipline and basics portrayed in a formal educated setting.
While many aspects of formal education may seem excessive to an individual's goal and destiny in life, those exact aspects may be essential in extraneous activities in one's daily living regarding other factors and cannot be eradicated from the educational system. For the society and culture to continue with its diversity and progress regarding intellectual capabilties, it is important that each individual, or at least the majority of the population, possesses common formal knowledge that is provided in the classrooms.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun might seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much might', 'a good deal of might'.
Suggestion: much might; a good deal of might
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, regarding, so, still, then, while, at least
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 14.8657303371 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 12.9106741573 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2468.0 2235.4752809 110% => OK
No of words: 470.0 442.535393258 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25106382979 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92120763583 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 215.323595506 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527659574468 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 767.7 704.065955056 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.9346706484 60.3974514979 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.4 118.986275619 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5 23.4991977007 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.85 5.21951772744 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272300400283 0.243740707755 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0805182196372 0.0831039109588 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0683129163905 0.0758088955206 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138207803687 0.150359130593 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0898820045394 0.0667264976115 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.1392134831 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.1639044944 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.45 8.38706741573 113% => OK
difficult_words: 139.0 100.480337079 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.