All parents should be required to volunteer time to their children's schools.
Volunteer work is meant to be a munificent activity performed by individuals who show some level of interest in the work. It is a voluntarily decision, hence why it is labeled as volunteer work. With the exception of miscreants who are ordered to allocate time to serve the community, volunteer work should not be forced upon anyone. The prompt engenders a proposition of neccessary volunteer work amongst parents. I strongly disagree and contend that the parents should not be required to unwillingly allocate time to their children's school for two reasons.
Firstly, the opportunity cost of volunteer might not be worth it for the parents. Volunteer work means working for free and that is a decision that should be made solely on the individual. For instance, if there is a family living in a state of penury, living paycheck to paycheck, and merely gliding by their impeccunious lives, how can they afford to take even a single day off from work to go volunteer at their children's school without the promise of any financial benefit. They would need to forego that day's paycheck and would encounter monetary issues. Another example would be of a set of parents who are doctors. Will volunteering at the school be more beneficial than affluent doctors saving lives? Perhaps in a very specific or singular case it could be beneficial, however, generally in most cases it would not. Therefore, the opportunity costs need to be carefully assessed and meticulously analyzed before the proposal is exhorted.
Further, ironically the suggested volunteer proposal can end up being expensive. Schools are a very delicate environment as they consist of children and teenagers. The schools should not be inundated with strangers without background checks, which would burgeon the expenses significantly and may even cause financial detriment rather than communal gain. For instance, there are millions of children in school, and assuming one parent for each child volunteers (with the data even including siblings, orphans, and foster kids), there would still be millions of volunteers, and therefore millions of background checks. Also other safety measures would also be included in the expenses. This could be a drastic drawback regarding their financial aspects. So before this recommendation is executed, the expenses associated with it also need to be scrupulously addressed.
Although volunteering at schools may appear to deteriorate costs, due to lost opportunity costs and expensive background checks, it might lead to expenses increasing. In order to ameliorate the system, they can provide the option to volunteer, but the rule as setting it as a requirement should not be executed.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 129, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('voluntarily') instead an adjective, or a noun ('decision') instead of another adjective.
...me level of interest in the work. It is a voluntarily decision, hence why it is labeled as volunteer w...
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Line 1, column 196, Rule ID: WITH_THE_EXCEPTION_OF[1]
Message: Use simply 'except' or 'except for'
Suggestion: Except; Except for
...ce why it is labeled as volunteer work. With the exception of miscreants who are ordered to allocate ...
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Line 5, column 510, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'days'' or 'day's'?
Suggestion: days'; day's
...benefit. They would need to forego that days paycheck and would encounter monetary i...
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Line 5, column 606, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...er example would be of a set of parents who are doctors. Will volunteering at the schoo...
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Line 9, column 308, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...xpenses significantly and may even cause financial detriment rather than communal...
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Line 9, column 618, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...herefore millions of background checks. Also other safety measures would also be inc...
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Line 13, column 148, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'expense'.
Suggestion: expense
...ive background checks, it might lead to expenses increasing. In order to ameliorate the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, regarding, so, still, therefore, for instance, in most cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 25.0 12.4196629213 201% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2272.0 2235.4752809 102% => OK
No of words: 429.0 442.535393258 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29603729604 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91819521504 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536130536131 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 702.0 704.065955056 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 59.1646393165 60.3974514979 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.272727273 118.986275619 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.09090909091 5.21951772744 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313835203695 0.243740707755 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0968170780498 0.0831039109588 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0717628377234 0.0758088955206 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.201355579647 0.150359130593 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0667078372603 0.0667264976115 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.1392134831 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 12.1639044944 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 100.480337079 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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