Claim: Many problems of modern society cannot be solved by laws and the legal system.
Reason: Laws cannot change what is in people's hearts or minds.
Laws and regulation are a strong premise for our society and economy. Without it, there could be an avalanche of issues falling upon us. However, there are few instances in which adhering to the legal aspects bound in ink in the rule books may prove to be futile. I strongly agree that there is an abundance of problems that are difficult or impossible to solve due to each indivudal's mentality.
Firstly, in cases of minor misdemeanors or other such minute cases, there are aspects which do not provide a sufficient basis to solve problematic issues. For example, plagarism or cheating are important issues within the educational system. Performing such activities may result in expulsion or the rescidment of admittance. However, many students or potential students of certain schools still proceed to go through with it in order to raise their chances of getting admitted to their top school. For example, a person who has this desire to attend their dream school in California could ask a professional essay writer to write their admittance or personal essay as they believe would not be able to provide a high quality written statement on their own. Despite this being against the rules, the indivudal does not follow it and continues to seek for unethical help as his heart is set on his dream school and his mind is set on retrieving this goal in anyway possible.
Furthermore, in the signficantly more severe and sensitive topic regarding violence, there are laws that are not adhered to by criminals. For instance, in California, there are austere gun laws that prohibit normal individuals to carry their guns outside their homes without a license, as do many states. However, obtaining a license in California is extremely difficult and the majority of the citizens there adhere to the law and do not carry a gun even if they prefer to. An exception to this rule are those indivudals who go against the law and carry the weapon. For instance, in recent events at a garlic festival in California, a mass shooting took place. The person performing this atrocious activity went against the state policy. Despite having a strict regulation in place, the law was not able to change what the criminal in the event had in his heart and mind. The rules were unable to prevent him from creating such catastrophe.
Laws are an essential aspect to our society. It creates boundaries and limits which control our world from bursting into flames. Having a speed limit and executing the law make the roads safer, inculpating thieves, rapists, and murderes provides extreme justice, and setting limits to many other aspects can create a premise for a stable environment. However, many laws of these laws and regulations are ignored by those who do not wish to adhere to it and do what they wish to do anyway. Therefore, there is a plethora of rules that go ignored.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 120, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t, there could be an avalanche of issues falling upon us. However, there are few ...
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Line 5, column 955, Rule ID: IN_ANYWAY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'in any way'?
Suggestion: in any way
...his mind is set on retrieving this goal in anyway possible. Furthermore, in the sig...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
anyway, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, regarding, so, still, therefore, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 58.6224719101 121% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2392.0 2235.4752809 107% => OK
No of words: 487.0 442.535393258 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91170431211 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69766713281 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6529551623 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 215.323595506 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523613963039 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 769.5 704.065955056 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.1956479691 60.3974514979 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.0 118.986275619 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1739130435 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.91304347826 5.21951772744 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 5.13820224719 234% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17366080351 0.243740707755 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0477518474614 0.0831039109588 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0433244807102 0.0758088955206 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110188995829 0.150359130593 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0354446841878 0.0667264976115 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.1392134831 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 132.0 100.480337079 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.