All parents should be required to volunteer time to their children's schools.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
Many of us had spent our time in school when we were children, thus many of our parents actually had some voluntary works in the school. For example, traffic guides at crosswork, catering service in lunch time, installing equipments for a small festival may be the representative work done by parents. However, some parents do not want to be a volunteer and participate in those. Therefore, some may argues that all parents should be required to volunteer time to their children’s schools. It seems compelling, however, I will contend in the following essay that this statement is quite implausible and idealistic assertion.
First, admittedly, there may be some merits for requiring all parents to have volunteer time. If the parents participate in the schools’ activities, they may have a responsibility to their children’s schools, thus they also may feel solidarity which can help introduce the identification with the schools. Finally, they may be more resposive to the schools’ policies the fact that it may be beneficial to make the schools more better and responsible to their students. Furthermore, the friendships between the parents and their children may be enhanced than before when they do not involve in the volunteer jobs for the schools.
However, this statement that the volunteer time have to be mandatory for all parents seems implausible. Many parents, not just fathers, may have their own jobs for their stipends and professional careers. If the policy stated in the statement is realized, they may have been suffered from cessation of their regular jobs. In fact, the volunteer time may be in early morning or late night, however in this case, the parents are extorted their rest then appealing extreme fatigue which is likely to cause the inability in their performance in their own occupations. Moreover, using part-timers for the volunteer time may be more efficient for the safety and happiness of their children. From many empirical cases, the paid workers are likely to have a more responsibility to their jobs than volunteers. The problem is the cost, however, I think it is more better to demand proportional money for the cost to each of the parents. To sum up, the statement that asserting to make volunteer time being mandatory to all parents is neither efficient nor plausible.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 439, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'better' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: better
...t may be beneficial to make the schools more better and responsible to their students. Furt...
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Line 9, column 851, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'better' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: better
...lem is the cost, however, I think it is more better to demand proportional money for the co...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, for example, i think, in fact, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1964.0 2235.4752809 88% => OK
No of words: 379.0 442.535393258 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18205804749 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99005715595 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.482849604222 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 603.0 704.065955056 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.0040367149 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.529411765 118.986275619 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2941176471 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.23529411765 5.21951772744 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.97078651685 60% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252246111784 0.243740707755 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104690144537 0.0831039109588 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0700862930419 0.0758088955206 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192560579227 0.150359130593 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0136541053962 0.0667264976115 20% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 100.480337079 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.