Essay topics: Society should make efforts to save endangered species only if the potential extinction of those species is the result of human activities.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
Environmental degradation is one of the most severe and influential problem in the contemporary human society in all of the world. Especially, a spate of endangered species are now threathened by anthropogenic factors made by human beings. That’s why some people argue that society should make efforts to save those species, however, only if the latent extinction of those species is the result of human activities because of the limited resources which can be input for them. Nevertheless it seems plausible, I do not agree this statement because of the reasons I would like to elaborate at the following essay.
First, we must have a responsibility to the entire ecological system, not only in part of the potential results of human activities. As abovementioned, environmental degradation have been exacerbated by the development of civilzation after industrialization and precipitate demographic growth in Earth. Many peoples, in fact, have asserted that we cannot be able to protect all of the species in ecological system because using natural resources as foods, medicines, and industries for developments is inevitable to human beings. However, if we do not care enough to the environment problem, we may have to experience the unpredictable results. In contemporary, despite of the scientific efforts, climate changes have always been more severe than before. Unless this catastrophic flow do not be stopped, human beings are likely to suffer from the extreme environment. We may not be able to use car because of the depletion of fossil fuels, or computer because of insufficient electricity from any fuels.
Furthermore, we cannot be sure that we are able to clearly determine the causal relation between the human activities and each of the extinctions of species. Any scientific theory have been destroyed by new perspectives, thus we are not able to believe that the extant explanation about the extinctions of those species are surely correct. Moreover, butterfly effect, which means that a tiny factor can result in a tremendous results, makes unpredictable the consequence of our daily behavior. For example, a little of synthetic detergent used for laundry in last night may effect many species in nature in the ecological system. It may be just few effects in contemporary period, however, we do not know what the factor results after one, ten, or one hundred years. To sum up, we cannot be able to be sure about the possible consequences from the human activities.
In conclusion, in spite of the limits of our possible resources for protecting the extinction of species, in the lights of the counterparts above, this statement cannot be fully agreed with. Society have to make more efforts than before to save endangered species because of the moral responsibility in human beings and the unpredictable consequences from the extinction of species.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...em in the contemporary human society in all of the world. Especially, a spate of endangere...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Nevertheless,
... resources which can be input for them. Nevertheless it seems plausible, I do not agree this...
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Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...erted that we cannot be able to protect all of the species in ecological system because us...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'result'?
Suggestion: result
... tiny factor can result in a tremendous results, makes unpredictable the consequence of...
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Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
...gent used for laundry in last night may effect many species in nature in the ecologica...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, then, thus, for example, in conclusion, in fact, in spite of, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 77.0 58.6224719101 131% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2430.0 2235.4752809 109% => OK
No of words: 459.0 442.535393258 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29411764706 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17162545029 2.79657885939 113% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490196078431 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 791.1 704.065955056 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.2037790027 60.3974514979 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.894736842 118.986275619 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1578947368 23.4991977007 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.47368421053 5.21951772744 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219900987163 0.243740707755 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0741984560783 0.0831039109588 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0804050070379 0.0758088955206 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166921317056 0.150359130593 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0806169165737 0.0667264976115 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 14.1392134831 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.8420337079 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.1639044944 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 100.480337079 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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