In any profession—business, politics, education, government—those in power should step down after five years.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Many leaderships in the world had been corrupted by sustaining their own power during the very long-term period. That’s why some people have argued that any power in all of the field have to step down after five years. It seems quite plausible, however, we can not be clearly sure about the fact, in our history, the new leadership had been delivered a revitalization to success for a society.
Admittedly, in certain circumstances, power in any field needs to step down itself after five years. For example, North Korean dictatorship have sustained its own regime during 70 years more. Nevertheless each of the chairmans in North Korea, they are known as the most notorious dynasty in the world, which so called Kim Dynasty. In North Korea, about 22 millions people are suffering in extreme poverty. Furthermore, the regime have threatened the Earth by its nuclear weapons. It is a conspicuous problem that the continuous leadership in North Korea. On the other hand, in South Korea, the long-term leaderships in field of business have been problematic issue in its society. They called ‘Jaebeol’, which means the leadership’s descending to each of their own sons in the major company of South Korea, such as Samsung, SK, Hyundai, etc. Representatively, in the impeachment of the former S. Korean president Park, Geun-Hye, she have been accused of the malfeasance that receives the illegal bribes from those company. The major companies in South Korea have been such sacrosanct power that even a national president have been likely to depend them. To sum up, stepping down any leadership seems necessary to make a society being successful and prosperous.
However, leadership which is permanent or quite be persistent during long-term may be beneficial in some of the fields. German political leadership, for instance, have delivered the successful reunification with the counterparts, East Germany. The former prime minister, Helmut Kohl, had sustained its regime during about sixteen years in the late of the 20th century. When the leadership is in current, West Germany had became clearly the most prosperous country in Europe, and the state could achieve the historical reunification in Germany, which had divided each of democratic and communist country. The tenure system in universities and colleges also have shown the merits of long-term leadership in educational fields. If the professors have suffered from an instability for their dismiss, they may not be able to freely proclaim their own creative thought and theories. Such a system can vouch for the creativity and revitalization in the educational field.
In conclusion, some of the leadership have to be stepped down after five years or even some short-term period. However, in the lights of the counterparts above, the claim that any power in a variety of field should have to abrogate itself can not be fully agreed with.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 173, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...me people have argued that any power in all of the field have to step down after five year...
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Line 5, column 194, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Nevertheless,
...ed its own regime during 70 years more. Nevertheless each of the chairmans in North Korea, t...
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Line 5, column 950, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...S. Korean president Park, Geun-Hye, she have been accused of the malfeasance that re...
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Line 5, column 1025, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this company' or 'those companies'?
Suggestion: this company; those companies
...e that receives the illegal bribes from those company. The major companies in South Korea hav...
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Line 9, column 102, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...t during long-term may be beneficial in some of the fields. German political leadership, fo...
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Line 9, column 423, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'become'.
Suggestion: become
...dership is in current, West Germany had became clearly the most prosperous country in ...
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Line 13, column 17, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...educational field. In conclusion, some of the leadership have to be stepped down afte...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, even so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 58.6224719101 126% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2459.0 2235.4752809 110% => OK
No of words: 468.0 442.535393258 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25427350427 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65116196802 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.005409294 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 215.323595506 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497863247863 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 746.1 704.065955056 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.4902359552 60.3974514979 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.458333333 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95833333333 5.21951772744 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.119879923912 0.243740707755 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0389177989667 0.0831039109588 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0569306571293 0.0758088955206 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0955014769876 0.150359130593 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0447196474384 0.0667264976115 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.1392134831 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 100.480337079 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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