All parents should be required to volunteer time to their children's schools.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Children spent most of their time in school to get a proper education to become a functional adult in the future. One might suggest the policy that every parents should spend some of their time to volunteer and help their children at schools. While this policy seems to have some merit, it has some flawed that is needed to be addressed first before we actually force this policy. “Requiring” whole population to do something is not going to be effective due to the diverse situation each people have.
First, forcing parent to volunteer their time to help their children might be beneficial to the children, but on a generic sense, it might not be a good use of adult’s time. One might use those time create more impact to the society, which would have a wider effect. For instance, let take Dr. Achawit, one of the best surgery doctor in Thailand. Let’s imagine that he operate on one person every 2 hours. From this, we can say that he technically save 1 life every two hours. If we were to required to spend time with his children, then those time lost is he could have been use on operating on people who needed that. Imagine how absurd it is if a patient can not have their operation because their doctor were forced to spend time with their children. Encouraging parents to spend more time with their children and helping the schools is one thing, but making it mandatory might not be the best idea.
Continuing from the point that this policy might not be the best way to make adult spend their time, not all parents have something to offer to their offsprings. A historian who acquired complete knowledge regarding of Greek war and battles possibly is not the best person to help a children who have problem with their math multiplication homework. Instead, this historian’s time should be spent on teaching college students to learn more about the topics he knows about. Never forget that the one this historian will be teaching is definitely someone else child, so if we all employ this strategy of serving the best people that each person can given their knowledge, rather than forcing the support to direct to their children who might not need it at this moment, then it might be more appropriate.
One might argue that we are now in a society where parents and children spend less time together than ever. Enforcing this policy would allowed the families to spend more time together. While this seems reasonable, we must not forget that there are alternatives on how families can spend their time together. Instead of having parents helping their children with their schools, which the parent might not be good at, they could be having dinner at fancy restaurants or watching on of the latest Marvel’s movies. Instead being force to spend time together regarding education, they could have spend those time doing other available activities. If we really want to support this, we could have employ a policy where parents can take more time off to be with their children. Thus, enforcing the parents to help their children to be a mandatory policy is not so convincing compared.
As a result, the policy of requiring all parents to volunteer their time for their children might not be the best idea to solve existing problems. While it is undeniable that parents spend less time with their children, and that some parents could have been a good teacher, this will definitely not be true for everyone. Instead of enforcing everyone to this policy, we should try to encourage the policy instead to the one who want to participate. Enforcing a policy naively tends to brings more harm than good.
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Essay evaluation report
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 27 15
No. of Words: 628 350
No. of Characters: 2919 1500
No. of Different Words: 240 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 5.006 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.648 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.306 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 186 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 132 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 87 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.259 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.232 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.519 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.349 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.506 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.21 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 282, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a child' or simply 'children'?
Suggestion: a child; children
...possibly is not the best person to help a children who have problem with their math multip...
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Line 5, column 653, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[3]
Message: Did you mean 'give' or 'be given'?
Suggestion: give; be given
...ng the best people that each person can given their knowledge, rather than forcing th...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 137, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'allow'
Suggestion: allow
... than ever. Enforcing this policy would allowed the families to spend more time togethe...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 479, Rule ID: ON_OF_THE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'one'?
Suggestion: one
...dinner at fancy restaurants or watching on of the latest Marvel's movies. Ins...
^^
Line 7, column 518, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Instead,
... on of the latest Marvel's movies. Instead being force to spend time together rega...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 598, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'spent'.
Suggestion: spent
...er regarding education, they could have spend those time doing other available activi...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 698, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'employed'.
Suggestion: employed
...lly want to support this, we could have employ a policy where parents can take more ti...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 783, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ime off to be with their children. Thus, enforcing the parents to help their chil...
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Line 9, column 486, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'bring'.
Suggestion: bring
...te. Enforcing a policy naively tends to brings more harm than good.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, if, really, regarding, so, then, thus, while, for instance, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.5258426966 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 30.0 12.4196629213 242% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.3162921348 186% => OK
Pronoun: 73.0 33.0505617978 221% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 80.0 58.6224719101 136% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3019.0 2235.4752809 135% => OK
No of words: 628.0 442.535393258 142% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80732484076 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.00598923014 4.55969084622 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53921882808 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 215.323595506 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.40127388535 0.4932671777 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 931.5 704.065955056 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.7807276629 60.3974514979 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.814814815 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2592592593 23.4991977007 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.44444444444 5.21951772744 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.13820224719 195% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258250265242 0.243740707755 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0952820315765 0.0831039109588 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0686520252641 0.0758088955206 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18732270568 0.150359130593 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0172301110096 0.0667264976115 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 100.480337079 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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