The following is a memorandum from the business manager of a television station.
"Over the past year, our late-night news program has devoted increased time to national news and less time to weather and local news. During this period, most of the complaints received from viewers were concerned with our station's coverage of weather and local news. In addition, local businesses that used to advertise during our late-night news program have canceled their advertising contracts with us. Therefore, in order to attract more viewers to our news programs and to avoid losing any further advertising revenues, we should expand our coverage of weather and local news on all our news programs."
According to the manager of a television station, there have been many compaints regarding the weather and local news. The manager has mentioned that many businesses that used to advertise with the news program have cancelled their contract.The prompt suggests that burgeoning the time alloted to the local and weather news would also increase their revenue as he assumes it would bring in more viewers. However, before this conclusion can be properly assessed, the assumptions need to be meticulously analyzed and the implications need to be addressed by obtaining the answers to two questions.
Firstly, the business manager relates correlation and causation. He assumes that just because the late-night programs that have retracted their contracts during the deluge of complaints was due to the wanting of the time allocated to the weather and local news. However, there could be many other reasons for their cancellations. For instance, one of the late-night programs who cancelled their contracts may have done so because they might have found a more frugal deal elsewhere and decided that joining with the rival company may be more beneficial to them in terms of their profits. Therefore, before the business manager exhorts his recommendation, it needs to be averred that those specific programs retracted their contracts specifically due to the time given to the local and weather news.
Secondly, what were the complaints amde by viewers actually about? Was it regarding the time allocated to the local news and weather news or what it actually due to the quality of it? For instance, there could have been a myriad of complaints, with 70% of them revolving around the quality of the news given; they could be discontent about the inaccuracy of the weather predictions or the countenance of the local news reporter regarding certain issues. Even if the complaints are regarding the time, are the individuals contentious because of the lack of time granted to those two news programs or the excess of it? In this generation, one could look up the weather in seconds on their phone devices; the local news could be also be read from their local newspaper. It could also be that they do not care much for the local or weather news. It could be that they think the time allotted to the local news and weaher news is excessive and they would actually prefer more time for the national news. Thus, befor the supposition can hold merit, the details regarding the complaints need to be sought.
Finally, time also plays a major factor in such a proposal. Assuming that the complaints and the contract retractions are results of the lack of time allotted to the local and weather news, how does the business manager foresee that restoring the time devoted to these news to its former level will be as fruitful? How long ago was the former level upheld? If an ample amount of time has passed, then the environment, economy, society, and culture might have progressively changed since then. The importance of the local and weather news a decade ago might have been attenuated or it might have been increased. To determine if applying the former techniques would give the expected results, the manager needs to scrupously anaylze his surroundings and the economy for the current day.
In conclusion, the manager's recommendation is drastically blemished due to copious unjustified presumptionsl. Before the suggestion of raising the time devoted to the local and weather news is enforced, it is essential that the author provides adequate evidence, cogent reasoning to corroborate his claime, and sufficient answers to the stated questions. If the author makes progress and obtaines such remedies, then there is a possibility of further explication of his suggested proposal.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 620 350
No. of Characters: 3094 1500
No. of Different Words: 260 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.99 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.99 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.684 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 212 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 185 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 120 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 82 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.8 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.869 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.327 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.505 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.116 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 242, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...s program have cancelled their contract.The prompt suggests that burgeoning the tim...
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Line 13, column 264, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this news' or 'these newses'?
Suggestion: this news; these newses
...esee that restoring the time devoted to these news to its former level will be as fruitful...
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Line 17, column 20, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'managers'' or 'manager's'?
Suggestion: managers'; manager's
...he current day. In conclusion, the managers recommendation is drastically blemished...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, finally, first, firstly, however, if, look, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.9520958084 178% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 11.1786427146 206% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 28.8173652695 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 55.5748502994 133% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3185.0 2260.96107784 141% => OK
No of words: 619.0 441.139720559 140% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14539579968 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.98795655647 4.56307096286 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77284582184 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 204.123752495 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.426494345719 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 980.1 705.55239521 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.1114730546 57.8364921388 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.4 119.503703932 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.76 23.324526521 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.92 5.70786347227 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.67664670659 257% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.356332109851 0.218282227539 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115049634933 0.0743258471296 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100064729173 0.0701772020484 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212069388053 0.128457276422 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0556989372322 0.0628817314937 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 154.0 98.500998004 156% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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