Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and s

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Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

According to the speaker, formal education do not set our mind and spirit free but restrain. The generalization of the speaker is true in some cases and may not be true for every case. In my opinion, formal education might have some constraints but does not necessarily restrain our mind and spirit for two reasons.

Education is the means to give the life a direction, so does the formal education. The formal education system has abide the system of educating by some rules and regulations. However, being abide by the rules does not necessarily mean having no freedom. Every body has rights to pursue their own interest in life. As an example every school students are not forced to be a doctor, but he or she can pursue any field of study like arts, science or humanities and freely choose to be a dancer, doctor or a politician. Having formal education does not mean to restrain mind or soul.

Moreover, comparing a person with no formal education and had never been to school with a person who had pursued his career with the formal education, the formal seems restrained hid mind rather than the later. Having no formal education in modern era means having less or no opportunity in life.

However, we have some examples in society who have pursued their own interest by abandoning formal education. For example, Bill Gate is an university dropped out and very successful in his life. However, I do not believe that every college dropping student is successful in their life, people like bill gates, Steve Jobs are only exception. Also, if they had completed their university degree they might have been more successful.

In conclusion, having formal education binds a person in some rules and regulations but does not necessarily restrain our mind and soul. Every body in formal education system have their freedom to give their life any direction of their interest.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 116, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'abided', 'abode'.
Suggestion: abided; abode
...cation. The formal education system has abide the system of educating by some rules a...
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Line 7, column 137, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...al education. For example, Bill Gate is an university dropped out and very success...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, moreover, so, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion, in some cases

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 33.0505617978 61% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 58.6224719101 55% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1563.0 2235.4752809 70% => OK
No of words: 320.0 442.535393258 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.884375 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5917518659 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 215.323595506 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.471875 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 507.6 704.065955056 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.9670327032 60.3974514979 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.9411764706 118.986275619 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8235294118 23.4991977007 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.82352941176 5.21951772744 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151218951165 0.243740707755 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0645665534594 0.0831039109588 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0724140221184 0.0758088955206 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105820203857 0.150359130593 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0622873741764 0.0667264976115 93% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 14.1392134831 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 100.480337079 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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