Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The statement linking formal education negatively with mind shaping plays on recent educational experience over the past century. Historically, the educational framework is dated back to 12th century. Through generations, formal schooling has been developing the talents who invented outstanding solutions for complex problems. In the years of taking Master’s degree in MIT, Ivan Getting revolutionized the world with GPS technology. Consider DeepMind, UK-based company that mainly focuses on artificial intelligence innovations, was established by scientists who had recently completed their PhDs in UCL in London.
The statement states that formal schooling shapes the mind and preclude one’s creativity. A quick reflection on a typical education path informs how formal education is outdated. To be enrolled at a university, applicants are required to take entrance exams and the likeliness of doing well relies heavily upon familiarity with the exam format. Throughout undergraduate education, requirement to write scientific abstract following a special format demarcates human imagination. To that end, students learn from the hardest that they could be castigated for not following certain rules.
However, formal approach to education does not necessarily preclude the human imagination. The prior example reveals that great innovations were created at universities. Universities create unique environment for pundits who coalesce on research topics allowing for unprecedented exchange of ideas. With increased intercultural interactions, inspiration can arrive from the most surprising corners. Jeniffer Wild, one of the founders of nicotine patches, was sitting in the classroom when the idea just popped in her head. What’s more, formal schooling frees access to funding and grants to conduct research undertaken by PhD students. For example, the ameliorating effect of radioisotopes on cancer was first noted at Moscow State University by two russian pundits while working on the research, funded by European Commision.
In contrast to the statement, we can see how modern approaches to education free the human imagination. Consider how the digital revolution and the advent of the online education dramatically turned it on its head. Higher School of Economics, the leading university in Russia, adopted new teaching methods foreseeing the importance of open-mindedness for students’ future. With copious interdisciplinary subjects and practice-based groupwork, teachers attempt to free thinking and develop imagination. Last, but not least, the new grading scale for essay writing was embraced - it tends to focus on the critical thinking, rather than on minor format faults.
Formal education will always mark the human education path. Given the traditional methods of teaching, it will take not years, but decades to the whole system to change so profoundly. Inarguably in certain areas educational framework sets boundaries for one’s creativity, but generally leading universities encourage critical thinking.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ants are required to take entrance exams and the likeliness of doing well relies ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, so, well, while, for example, in contrast, in contrast to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 33.0505617978 39% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 12.9106741573 194% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2636.0 2235.4752809 118% => OK
No of words: 439.0 442.535393258 99% => OK
Chars per words: 6.00455580866 5.05705443957 119% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.20256144256 2.79657885939 115% => OK
Unique words: 281.0 215.323595506 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.640091116173 0.4932671777 130% => OK
syllable_count: 808.2 704.065955056 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.9375166034 60.3974514979 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 105.44 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.56 23.4991977007 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.28 5.21951772744 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168153775126 0.243740707755 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0454832716468 0.0831039109588 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0337861282631 0.0758088955206 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0952145294342 0.150359130593 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0203779654577 0.0667264976115 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 14.1392134831 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.3 48.8420337079 76% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.22 12.1639044944 142% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.92 8.38706741573 130% => OK
difficult_words: 179.0 100.480337079 178% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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