young people enjoy life more than older people.
There have been several disputed discussion on whether youngs birds enjoy life more than older people or not. As for everything, there are always two sides to every question. Personally, I believe that young people did not enjoy life If we compare with old people. I feel this for two reasons, which I explore in the following essay.
To begin with, the first reason is Competitive society. Competitive society creates a lot of problem for the young generation. Here problems include frustration, tension for small things; furthermore, such a competitive society creates health problems also. My personal example is a compelling example of this; about 10 years ago, I enrolled in Physics class, where I felt myself a below-average student as compare to other enrolled students. Such disaffection with physics created lot of problem like frustration over little things hesitated to talk with other students especially those who had a good command in physics. Therefore, young people are not able to docile their life in an appropriate manner as compare to older people.
Besides, the second reason is the increase in the depression rate among young peoples. Furthermore, the foremost reason behind the increase in depression rate is an increase in the unemployment rate. For better understanding, let us take the instance of my brother. About ten months ago, he has completed his major in computer application, however, still he was not able to get the job as the market was down that time. As a result, he depressed a lot and even not able to take food properly. Thus, young one lives a fearful life as compared to older people.
In conclusion, although there are some scenarios where young people enjoy more than older people; nevertheless, these scenarios are very rare especially in the current modern age. Personally, I believe that young birds are living a more fearful life because they do not feel safe.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, furthermore, however, if, nevertheless, second, so, still, therefore, thus, as for, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 9.8082437276 0% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 13.8261648746 14% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1616.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 316.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11392405063 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77508370486 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.572784810127 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 512.1 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.2083310482 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.7777777778 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5555555556 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.61111111111 5.45110844103 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.394635161827 0.236089414692 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120163558533 0.076458572812 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.164758090239 0.0737576698707 223% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.275125322335 0.150856017488 182% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.168291379499 0.0645574589148 261% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.06 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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