Young people enjoy life more than older people do.
Enjoyment in life differs from person to person and there are several means of entertainment and enjoyment in our life. Some people enjoy watching movies, some enjoy sports and some other enjoy art and literature. This is a quiet broad field and to some extent everybody likes to enjoy in their life. Personally, I believe that young people enjoy life more than older people do. I feel so for two reasons which I will discuss in the following essay.
First, young people tend to enjoy more than the older people because young people don’t have the presence of fear and worry in their life. They don’t have the responsibility to fulfill as the older people have in their life. Presence of spirit for enjoyment is also regarded as the important factor that helps the young people to enjoy more than the older do. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. When I was in my kinder garden I used to enjoy playing with my friends. I had no any feeling of responsibility and my mind was free and happy and I used to enjoy that time a lot. But, as I grow on more responsibility is being added and I can not enjoy to my fullest. Though, I enjoy to some extent but this enjoyment is lesser compared to what I used to enjoy when I was in my younger days. I think most of the people feel same as I do because of presence of more responsibility that goes on adding as we grow older. This hinders the extent to which we enjoy as it reminds us of the duties that we have to complete apart from the enjoyment in our day to day life.
Second, young people have the energy and spirit to enjoy that goes on fading with the time. During our younger days we can do many activities that we feel difficult to do after we grow older. The difficulties that we face increases as we grow older. For instance, my father use to enjoy going to trekking and hiking but as he is growing older his energy is fading away. He used to climb several difficult hills during his younger days which is very difficult for him to do such activities now. However, we have money and time in our older days the main thing required for the enjoyment which is the spirit and courage is decreased. Even if we want to enjoy our poor health, condition and decrease in confidence limits us from enjoying to our life. This is the reason why older people suggest the younger one to enjoy their life when they have energy and their life is full of spirit. The positive spirit certainly plays a vital role for driving our enjoyment activities.
In summary, I would like to say that the best time for enjoying our life is when we are young rather than when we grow old. The energy and spirit to do any work plays a vital role in our activities during our youth.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, apart from, for instance, i feel, i think, in summary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 73.0 43.0788530466 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2233.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 508.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.39566929134 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74751043592 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3694925309 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.383858267717 0.524837075471 73% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 720.0 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.9436120445 48.9658058833 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 85.8846153846 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5384615385 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.69230769231 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.495997186119 0.236089414692 210% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.173180142912 0.076458572812 227% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.195969117501 0.0737576698707 266% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.346720641113 0.150856017488 230% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.153207508128 0.0645574589148 237% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.24 10.9000537634 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.72 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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