Life is a process, and each stage of it has a particular beauty and significance. Having fun at the age of 60 is different from having a good time at the age of twenty, and I do not consider that one or another period is more enjoyable than the other. I do not believe that young people enjoy life more than older people do, because youngesters have also major difficulties. I will explain my statement in the following essay.
To begin with, being young does not means only living life on its peak and continuously partying. Nowadays, youngsters have to deal with plenty of challenges such as entering a good university, choosing a sustainable major, finding a well-paid job. These targets are difficult to reach because the number of educated people increased, and so did the competition. As a consequence, young adults spend a great amount of time in order to figure out how to compete in this situation. Furthermore, their mental health is affected because of the pressure they are constantly submitted to. My experience is a compelling example of this. Back in college I had to study intense in order to not loose my scholarship. In case this would have happened, my parents would have been forced to pay my tuition, and they could not afford it. Because of this, I did not have fun in my spare time, because I preferred to work extra. Unfortunately, I cannot say that college is a memorable period of my live from the fun point of view.
To continue with, once students graduate from college, they face another hard reality, which is the burden of finding a job. Young people must look for a career that provide enough income to become independent. They must take into account all the expenses such as rent, transportation, food and some money for fun. As entry-level, young people have to work a lot, most days overtime, and thereby they feel exhausted. From my experience I have to say that it is not easy to enjoy life in this circumstances. For instance, I was spending around ten hours a day at my first workplace, and aside from this I had to work on Saturdays as well. Because of this schedule, I was rarely going out and meet up my friends. Not to mention, that they were in the same situation. Sometimes i was wondering "Is this job worth all my dedication", because I was aware that I could not enjoy life as a young should do. I knew that soon I am going to enter a new stage of my life, and these years are impossible to be recovered.
To summarize, at present youngsters have hardships about enjoying life, and they definitely do not have a better time than older people. This is because current social and economical environment determine youth to study and work a lot and to make huge sacrifices.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 37, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'mean'
Suggestion: mean
... To begin with, being young does not means only living life on its peak and contin...
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Line 3, column 686, Rule ID: LOOSE_LOSE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
... I had to study intense in order to not loose my scholarship. In case this would have...
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Line 5, column 370, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'days'' or 'day's'?
Suggestion: days'; day's
..., young people have to work a lot, most days overtime, and thereby they feel exhaust...
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Line 5, column 488, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ay that it is not easy to enjoy life in this circumstances. For instance, I was spen...
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Line 5, column 776, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...y were in the same situation. Sometimes i was wondering 'Is this job worth a...
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Line 7, column 173, Rule ID: ECONOMICAL_ECONOMIC[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, look, so, well, for instance, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2251.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 486.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6316872428 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69525374022 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79621150742 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51646090535 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 726.3 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.9088605739 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.5769230769 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6923076923 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.15384615385 5.45110844103 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229638854117 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0640017677928 0.076458572812 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.120585316361 0.0737576698707 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184602565688 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.13210165332 0.0645574589148 205% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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