157: In the future, students may have the choice of studying at home by using technology such as computers or television or of studying at traditional schools. Which would you prefer? Use reasons and specific details to explain your choice.
Educational system is continuously developing, and the future will certainly bring major changes into this domain. While some students opt to go to traditional schools, others will prefer studying at home by using technology. I think the latter option is more advantageous, due to the fact that pupils are able to choose exactly the fields they like, and because they have time for other useful activities. I will explain my statement, in the following essay.
First and foremost, students can choose to study exactly the fields they are interested in. If a student goes to a traditional school, he has to study the fields selected by the Educational Affair. Conversely, home schooling gives the chance to students to study whatever they consider suitable for a future, bright career. Even nowadays, home schooling offers this possibility. Moreover, scholars have access to thousands of online actualized materials, they can join study groups, share opinions and save a lot of valuable time. So, unnecessary fields are eliminated from their schedules, and pupils can concentrate on what truly matters. For example, when I was in school, I was forced to study music and painting, which was a total waste of time, because I am not talented at arts. Although I have an awful voice and two lefts hands, I was not offered other alternatives, and I still regret losing precious time. Thus, home schooling offers the freedom to decide on the adequate fields to study.
To continue with, studying from home is time-saving because students do not have to spend time in traffic anymore, especially those who are living in cities. Furthermore, when pupils are at school they are spending their energy between classes too. Consequently, when they arrive at home, they need some time to rest in order to recover. Sometimes, they cannot have extra pastime activities because they have to do endless homework. But, by opting for home schooling, they have the chance to avoid all these situations. More and more students can do sports such as swimming, volleyball, football, or they can join music, art, theater clubs and so forth. These all bring a plus to their self-growth.
To summarize, studying at home by using technology is definitely more profitable than going to a traditional school. This is because students can focus and improve the fields which are relevant for them, and because they have enough time left to explore other significant activities that contribute for self-development.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, conversely, first, furthermore, if, moreover, so, still, thus, while, as for, as to, for example, i think, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2086.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 406.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13793103448 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79568259996 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546798029557 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 654.3 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.0095347531 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.8181818182 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4545454545 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.04545454545 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228814306545 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0758965568326 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0789908195809 0.0737576698707 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163890823009 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0320773613455 0.0645574589148 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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