In the future, students may have the choice of studying at home by using technology such as computers or television or of studying at traditional schools. Which would you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Education is the most important developing platform for people around the world. It is crucial to have access to recent technological advancement and any available changes in educational system. Some people prefer to give their children to traditional schools but others would chose home schooling. I would choose a traditional way of education. I will broach some reasons that validate my opinion.
Let’s compare pros and cons of both options to see the vivid picture. First, children who go to a school interact with their peers and improve their communicative skills. On the contrary children who are home schooling stay with their parents or tutor, or in front of a screen of the device. Their social adjustment might be more difficult than those kids who have experience of traditional school. Parents who give their preference to a traditional study would not have issues with spending their time for teaching their children or searching for a tutors, or the best online courses. Moreover, not every parent has time and capabilities to teach their children in the most productive way as professional teachers. Teachers and tutors usually use their methods and materials in order to succeed in a study sessions, they can distinguish some problems with their students and provide the most useful advice or solution. Students who study at home using technology would not be able to a personal meeting with the teacher and would lose this chance to succeed. They should be able to comprehend the information and memorize it by themselves. Technology can’t provide kids with the easiest ways for understanding materials; children should be capable for that on their own. Also, some parents cannot watch their kids during their study time and no one would be sure if the child has watched a lecture or a cartoon.
Another good thing about the traditional school is that the most children don’t know what field they want to study even in a high school. It is rear when a teenager knows, what field he or she would like to work in. Children need to be well-around to find their own interest in a specific field, they need to study every science and available domain to see the big picture and become passionate about something. That is why it is more favorable for children to study a variety of subjects to find their path in life. Personally, I became passionate about one particular science when I graduated from university and went to a medical college, when I was twenty five. No one can argue that if the parent gives a choice to his child in education, in a school time, he diminishes the vast of options to find the right subject for the future career of his kid.
One way or another, the bottom line here is that people tend to follow the advancements and change their behavior and habits in order to succeed in a lifetime. In my opinion it is more valuable to study in a traditional environment and facilitate our educational system with the cutting edge technology in order to help teachers to impart the knowledge to students.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 278, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'choose'
Suggestion: choose
...to traditional schools but others would chose home schooling. I would choose a tradit...
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Line 1, column 284, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to home'
Suggestion: to home
...ditional schools but others would chose home schooling. I would choose a traditional...
^^^^
Line 3, column 554, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a tutor' or simply 'tutors'?
Suggestion: a tutor; tutors
...eaching their children or searching for a tutors, or the best online courses. Moreover, ...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, so, well, in my opinion, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2543.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 520.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89038461538 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77530192783 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71651139729 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494230769231 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 793.8 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.7761575192 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.958333333 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6666666667 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.45110844103 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164799440185 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0512298561609 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0596376410896 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0972715107095 0.150856017488 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0335994644145 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 86.8835125448 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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