Young people enjoy more than older people

Essay topics:

Young people enjoy more than older people

Age should not be the barrier to enjoy our life. We should enjoy our life at fullest. However, there are many reasons why younger people enjoy more than older one. I believe in this way because of two reasons which I will explain in the following passage.

First, younger people are not constrained with time boundaries. As we cross the age of twenties, our responsibilities increases either it is at work or family. Older people get busy in their life while youngsters are not bounded with such responsibility until they get married. In my personal experience, my brother, before getting married, use to go for the road trip every weekend, but now he is busy with is office work and family. Thus, I could say that in comparison with responsibility, young age is the time when we enjoy the life most.

Second, health decline as we get older with time. It is natural that our body physical fit decreases as our age increase especially when we do not take care ourself. Usually, young people are more concern about their health and physical look that they worry about their body and try to maintain it health by doing exercise, going for walk or gym. But as people start to get the load of work, they unable to take out a minute to take of themselves which in result affect their health. For instance, most of the people, with age above fourty, are suffering from obesity, and this also affect their health which also resist them to enjoy their life such as by avoiding favourite food or going on long trek because body starts to pain. Therefore, as age increase, humans health starts to decline until they take care of themselves.
In conclusion, I would like to say that younger people get more chance to enjoy the life than the old people because youngster are not bounded with responsible and their health is not affect by their age as it is affected by age of older people

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, second, so, therefore, thus, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1550.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 335.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62686567164 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43786861542 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489552238806 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 489.6 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.7948976454 48.9658058833 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.875 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9375 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.8125 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291007541168 0.236089414692 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107214426563 0.076458572812 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.132324845462 0.0737576698707 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23205706873 0.150856017488 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107323121875 0.0645574589148 166% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.27 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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