Many people may imagine to draw their lives on their own. I agree with the statement that young people make decisions based on their parents. These are the following reasons: recommendations from parents are all for us, kids are not matured enough to decide huge things on their lives, they can make numerous determinations without parents someday.
To begin with, parents always care about their kids. They will suggest things which is the best that the parents think. Parents who recommend to their kids will think based on what they experienced; I believe that experiences are the best education that the people can have. For instance, when I was trying to go on a vocational school, my mother told her episodes that she endured. The story was from her previous job because she did not graduate in university at that time. I never regret that I followed my parents.
Secondly, young people do not have sufficient wisdom to distinguish what they are supposed to. Like I said before, experiences make the human grow. Thus, they do not have enough experiences to be wise. Youth are not able to notice the risks that can ruin on what they predict. As an example, my parents usually warn me before I imposed to cook when I was young. Actually, they had forbidden me to cook because they knew that there are fire and knives. In addition, I also got hurt due to knife when I ignored them.
Moreover, young people will live even after they followed their parents. I do not demand them to listen and to ask to their parents all the time. We are not with our parents every single time that we are making the decisions; we can yield or give up on what we claim. Since I am attending to boarding school, I need to make my own choices without parents. In other words, I prefer to follow my parents because I have freedom in the dormitory.
To sum up, I believe that young people make, and need to make decisions in consideration of parents’ suggestion.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 17, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'imagine drawing'.
Suggestion: imagine drawing
Many people may imagine to draw their lives on their own. I agree with ...
Line 4, column 451, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
...ious job because she did not graduate in university at that time. I never regret ...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, for instance, in addition, in other words, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1619.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 347.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.66570605187 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51056451143 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.524495677233 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 503.1 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.577015996 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.5909090909 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7727272727 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.90909090909 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.358294817623 0.236089414692 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112469561616 0.076458572812 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.165292724085 0.0737576698707 224% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.242406854693 0.150856017488 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.14016798765 0.0645574589148 217% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
automated_readability_index: 8.5 11.7677419355 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.51 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.93 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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